| Re: A Glass of Milk Inagodadavida by EAger to Offend |
Bobjim 172.185.8.51 |
12-Dec-04/1:09 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/12:29 PM |
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The one you just posted, then deleted, is better.
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/10:01 AM |
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Great rhythm, a vivid picture. The only problem I see is that eyes are convex and do not magnify, but rather diminish the apparent size of objects reflected from them.
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| Re: two by hendrimike |
hendrimike 152.163.100.67 |
12-Dec-04/4:57 PM |
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| Re: I Have... by SupremeDreamer |
INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67 |
12-Dec-04/12:04 PM |
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At least they're talking to you. Either I've gone so horribly off track that no lifeline can reach, or I'm so accurate now no one can complain. I'm leaning on the former. Can I borrow some dope?
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| Re: The ABC's Of Adultery by horus8 |
ErgoErgun 216.144.195.69 |
12-Dec-04/4:27 PM |
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the catalogue serves the perspective to perfection
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| Re: That One Time Last Summer, Remember? by jessicazee |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.138 |
12-Dec-04/5:26 AM |
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| Re: I Have... by SupremeDreamer |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.138 |
12-Dec-04/5:45 AM |
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Preaching to the choir-Amen.
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| Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/9:01 AM |
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(submitted for application to The Rutherford Club)
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/9:17 AM |
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Why must you continually mock the fine standards the âbrothers in wordâ have set forth for us as good and proper format for our submittals? Such jabs as Hollywood shoeshine Boy, Idiot Soup, and now this, go counter to the kindhearted, if sometimes lewd, guidance we have been receiving, donât you think? Actually, youâve added some pleasing nuances in this revision, if only they were in a more readable format.
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/9:30 AM |
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Of course you already know this is riddled with cliches and redundancies, so I won't mention them, but why can't you see the point of her coyness? If she loves you and says it outright, you'll be repulsed. Hints are all she can give.
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| Re: That One Time Last Summer, Remember? by jessicazee |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/9:37 AM |
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A improvement over "Going Camping," quite good, but I wish you'd remove that dripping shower.
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| Re: The Grey Prince Of Gulls by Caducus |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
13-Dec-04/6:42 AM |
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The grey prince of guffs would be apposite.
You appalling flange.
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| Re: two by hendrimike |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/6:45 PM |
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The second verse is a bit preachy and some of the rhymes are forced, and it's wordy, but the idea is good and your feelings are good, and it's a good thing to say in some succinct way.
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| Re: Some Poem by jauser |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/6:47 PM |
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Try again when you're sober.
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| Re: A Glass of Milk Inagodadavida by EAger to Offend |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
12-Dec-04/6:56 PM |
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Your title is a confusingly worded sign in West Virginia. Once past it, the grass is green.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
EAger to Offend 65.95.126.37 |
12-Dec-04/10:51 PM |
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...uhhh, try "the jetsom of my desire."
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| Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina |
blacksoul 204.215.33.252 |
13-Dec-04/3:16 AM |
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Got to get that cup just right dont want nothing happening to the family jewels you understand.
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blacksoul 204.215.33.252 |
13-Dec-04/3:23 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
13-Dec-04/4:18 AM |
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