Re: Lost by Sweet Cheese	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	26-Oct-04/12:18 PM
You're foreign.
Re: Grandma in love by Caducus	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	26-Oct-04/11:41 AM
Intensely lewd, particularly the bit where you scoff your grandmother's remains.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/12:19 PM
Ok Here's my 2 cents. Words and letters are pictures. Abstract symbols. Heirogliphs. So they are applicable to the laws of graphic design.(I'm not talking Concrete poetry). What I mean is placement or layout of words can change their power somewhat.For instance the word stop on a sign has more significance then the word stop on a VCR. Indents are a great way to say this next word has extra meaning, it's more important. As far as breathing and pauses go. It's more of a crap shoot. It depends on who is reading it.Here's a verse of a bad poem I wrote that attempts to make the reader run out of breath. I never dreamed that I would see such beauty like Emily her eyes a silver blue sea that envelopes me as I gaze upon thee I am helplessly I am hopelessly drowning drowning in her beauty lost at sea in a silver blue sea See what I mean "crap shoot". Ed through the dice and I think he got a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/12:33 PM
Great work. No need to comment. The work speaks for itself.
Re: Harvey the Dolphin Sucker by T. Jonathron Remp	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/10:54 AM
comment by Richard E. Watley just beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/10:59 AM
i like my fright well salted. This and the redundancy already pointed out aside, the mood creation is effective.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/11:11 AM
Your a very versital poet. You seem to cover a wide spectrum with your body of work. Jack of all trades master of some you got it in spades
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	26-Oct-04/11:13 AM
This is exactly what every single black person looks like: http://tinyurl.com/4tz3k
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 195.92.168.178	26-Oct-04/11:22 AM
killer opening really cool likey - very much
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/11:22 AM
Don't like the city much. Do you?
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 195.92.168.178	26-Oct-04/11:25 AM
Distinctive, real refreshing to see thoughts/poetry like this.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/11:28 AM
is it possible to reap what is already dead? Or would that just be collection? Great ending
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/11:30 AM
though i would suggest, "i pondered the robin's plight" "on" seems out of place and the to capitalize "Robin" makes me think of Batman. I pondered the robins' plight and we both searched for a new home.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/11:31 AM
Sure beats "Happy birthday to you, happy birthday to you..."
Re: Grandma in love by Caducus	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/11:36 AM
a wicked and inspired jug solo
Re: Grandma in love by Caducus	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	26-Oct-04/11:38 AM
i would suggest "new" in place of "anew" also, "fall" in place of "falter" a 10 anyway
Re: A Runner's Fistful of Haiku by HaikuMofo	razorgrin 192.207.76.85	26-Oct-04/11:57 AM
I am out of shape. Lack of groceries has suppressed my masochism. Somewhat.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/12:46 PM
Starting with Hitchcock and ending with porn? Useually my day is the reverse of that.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/12:53 PM
I thinks Van Gogh's more of an adjective in this poem. Like "How was your day.- Oh It's been van gogh. I've got an Ode to Dali I might just post up for you art fans.
regarding some deleted poem...	thisismyusername 64.136.27.225	26-Oct-04/1:33 PM
i really like this one bratsy!