Re: Alone by rrashi	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	27-Oct-04/3:15 AM
Astonishing use of "fumes" to rhyme with "perfume".
Re: repeated sins, repeated prayer by oneglove	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	27-Oct-04/5:25 AM
you are so weak. you are so inadequate.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	27-Oct-04/5:32 AM
what, or whom was this person "laying"?
Re: What is a poet by INTRANSIT	sliver 65.178.193.47	26-Oct-04/8:53 PM
So true. the part about the poison. Hey , do me a favor, read my poem into my world, acrostic. Tell me what you think. It made it to the top ten in less than a week. But personally, I think it's kinda weak.
Re: the coming of Fall by Sasha	sliver 65.178.193.47	26-Oct-04/8:57 PM
This rings home for me. I've been asked to come cut down some trees from the Hayman burn area on the Eastern slope Of the Colorado Rockies(Just about 50 miles from my home). Turns out I used to picnic where these people are building a house.
Re: Alone by rrashi	zodiac 212.118.11.11	27-Oct-04/1:18 AM
Great@!!1
Re: repeated sins, repeated prayer by oneglove	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	27-Oct-04/3:32 AM
By posting this prayer on a public prayer ranking website, you've definitely increased your chances of getting into heaven. Well done!
Re: repeated sins, repeated prayer by oneglove	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	27-Oct-04/5:11 AM
Prayer is ok but have you tried heroin? Honestly it is the panacea!
Re: Who is deserving of all my love by zodiac	oneglove 205.133.194.234	27-Oct-04/5:32 PM
nice job. when God is speaking it reminds me of a band named mewithoutYou. i found this interesting since they are christian band. it evokes good emotions and pulls the reader in. very nice.
Re: Alone by rrashi	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	27-Oct-04/5:28 AM
and in which orafice were you enjoying this "cone"?
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	27-Oct-04/12:11 PM
Staggering, really. And who would imagine It would do such a thing?
Re: Alone by rrashi	Dovina 17.255.240.6	27-Oct-04/1:40 PM
Beware of the ten-vote and the opposite comment. Too many commas. "Smell filled with perfume" is wordy and redundant. "happy and rejoiced" sounds funny. To feel one with nature is to use a cliche. Some good ideas needing better words.
Re: Summer nights alone and their affect on the psyche by oneglove	Dovina 17.255.240.6	27-Oct-04/1:44 PM
Title sounds like a master's thesis. "hands on my heart" - like it. S2 - why not leave out the The"'s? "beloved" sounds archaic in this context.
regarding some deleted poem...	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/2:33 PM
It seems your man of thought is calling your man of action a coward. Maybe they'll duke it out. The last poem in the series really brings it home.
Re: A Girl’s Climax by Dovina	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/3:20 PM
6 words: He's just not that into you. sorry I was looking for a place to drop that new catch phrase. I think your poetry's excellent.
Re: Sacrament by Dovina	Imago 64.8.77.144	26-Oct-04/3:27 PM
You just gave me an idea. Broken bread and spilt wine as a metaphor for a woman's deflowering.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	26-Oct-04/4:11 PM
There's more to poetry than likening things to flowers, you know. And just how is friendship bigger than the sky? Nothing's bigger than the sky you idiot. Good one, though -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.19.210	26-Oct-04/4:16 PM
I don't like this poeme. The rhymes are rubbish. Bloody silly stuff, I'm afraid :(
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.156.155	26-Oct-04/5:59 PM
Da's 10-vote either means he loves it and his comment oxymononic, or it means he hates it and his vote is to keep you off the Worst List, or he thinks 0 is higher than 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	thisismyusername 64.136.27.225	27-Oct-04/2:22 PM
i loved that sermon! and i also love the poem!!