regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	25-Oct-04/7:02 PM
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeek
Re: The Ebony Orchid of Theta by Shardik	edpeterson 68.79.58.106	25-Oct-04/11:55 AM
eleven
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/11:33 AM
An absolutely wonderful treatise on the war.
Re: Untitled by Imago	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/11:53 AM
Two misspelled words and too broad. Needs specifics.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.97.168	25-Oct-04/6:34 AM
You'll probably hate me for this, or think I'm prude: (fucking) change it? and (gleams) I believe to be too trite for this poem. I have no beef with anything else here or on your other poem. If I haven't said it before, "take your ace poems and get outta here".
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.97.168	25-Oct-04/6:35 AM
10
Re: From Then Till Now by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Sweet Cheese 202.152.10.77	25-Oct-04/6:38 AM
Err, I think it should be ice cream and not ice scream?
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.97.168	25-Oct-04/6:39 AM
This is one of those times when a simple idea just works. You stayed away from the hard rhyme and that helps it because you wanted a warm feeling. Excellent. A hard rhyme would have made it feel forced or technical or rigid. Bring on part the deuce!!
Re: Transposed by <{Baba^Yaga}>	sliver 63.190.65.77	24-Oct-04/7:54 PM
Just stopped by to return the favor. If it's any consolation I don't care for your collection of meaningless shit than you do for mine, but I don't take the time to log in to my multiple personalities and give you more than one score. Just one, from me. I have seen a few things in your words that have made me stop to think, but you aren't running a really good race in life. I'm not a psycologist, but if you are really the way you are, you need one. he he heee...
Re: Reality by NeeMan	Jezabele-In-Hell 66.209.81.134	24-Oct-04/11:30 PM
I like it!
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.93	25-Oct-04/10:08 AM
I agree with Mr.I A simple idea warmly written. I've tried to hear the music behind the lyric and keep getting caught at "Still, there's a peace, Felt by all who come To stand beside the fireplace, And somehow feel at home." Is this the refrain or the chorus? All the other verses flow with the mekody I've assigned to it in my "mind's ear.'
Re: For Ike by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.93	25-Oct-04/10:27 AM
I liked Ike but not as much as I like your poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.242.187	25-Oct-04/10:40 AM
If it were an option, I'd vote for E. Coli.
Re: Untitled by Imago	Imago 64.8.77.130	25-Oct-04/10:42 AM
I think I should lose the (in it) of line 2. Seems unnecessary.
Re: what a load by the outhouse poet	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/1:47 PM
From an outhouse at a campground long ago. Not original.
Re: You by Fire_is_cool	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/1:59 PM
If you want to post a new poem, please do so. But when you pose a new poem as a revision of an old poem, the old comments look crazy.
Re: Vesper Song by M Hamill	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/2:02 PM
The first two lines say almost nothing. They set a dull pace which does not improve very much.
Re: Unwanted by Fire_is_cool	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/3:10 PM
The commas are mostly not right. This is not really a poem, but a statement in prose, a missive.
Re: Withering Rose by Imago	Dovina 24.52.156.155	25-Oct-04/3:17 PM
Some good thoughts here, but lack of precision detracts. In verse 1, beauty does not make things like homes. In vers 2, "and this the state i've found you" doesn't add anything. Verse 3 is good. In Verse 4, "How time has shown it's presence" lacks meaning.. . .
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 147.226.176.14	25-Oct-04/5:10 PM
Beautifully put...makes me homesick for the home I have never known...