Re: Ode to the Bun by JaneDC	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:29 PM
fat arse
Re: swallow it by anonandonandon	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:30 PM
Indeed.
Re: The Spaz by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:12 PM
A Fartstenching Staggering Work Of Weenus
Re: MR Blobby V bill and ben by MR Blobby	richa 81.178.242.35	14-Jul-04/12:53 PM
yes, 'flob alob flob weeeed' is my favourite bit of bill and ben gibberish too.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:16 PM
I'd fuck you both with a rubber chicken, and then trade your violated besoiled vulvas to marylin mansons keyboardist Tic for a handfull of dippity doo and a pair of edible chaps.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:25 PM
Really, these chicks are like from Iowa? The only thing to be scared of in Iowa, is POSSIBLY falling asleep, and than being sat on by a great aunt or a smart cow. A. We don't know why, nor do we care why they are scared. B. Even if we did, that wouldn't stop the laughing C. I can't help but wonder, how can they BE SCARED when they are most asssuredly sighing because neither were forced into the trunk of a car with a rabid black midget nick named 'the wedge'. I mean fine for one more day? What the fuck is that supposed to mean? Fine from what? Some frat boy schmuck sniffing out an untucked tampon string? their mother finding the brittle black skid marks on one of their secret g-strings? Please., this poem is screaming for BIG BLACK COCK, any fucking blind babboon could see that I mean "panting"? LOL, okay...? Somebody pass me my puppy shampoo.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:27 PM
YEAST
Re: MR Blobby V bill and ben by MR Blobby	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:28 PM
Yes
Re: Old Friends by sliver	horus8 24.130.62.63	14-Jul-04/12:33 PM
Old Rearends By Captain Napkin A wedding mannana Somewhere in Rowanda The groom has AIDS As Uranus fades Away, yadda yadda yadda.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.35	14-Jul-04/12:56 PM
The end is a touch disappointing, other than that excellent stuff.
Re: The Fourth Of July 2004 by horus8	Prince of Void 217.218.131.144	14-Jul-04/1:01 PM
that was good..but you know...the last line shows the whole meaning so i love the last line
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.35	14-Jul-04/1:05 PM
At times I will notice someone’s glance in my direction, then I start to fear that they must know. My heart races my palms and soles sweat, my panting commences, my only desire is to become invisible. But then they look away, I sigh knowing that I am fine for one more day. There is no reason to write it like you have and not like this I think.
regarding some deleted poem...	Prince of Void 217.218.131.144	14-Jul-04/1:08 PM
Interesting
Re: Ode to the Bun by JaneDC	richa 81.178.242.35	14-Jul-04/1:32 PM
Pleasant enough sounds.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 17.255.240.138	14-Jul-04/10:16 AM
It's a good expression of something we've all experienced, but stretching it out over all these lines and blank lines only makes it less effective.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 17.255.240.138	14-Jul-04/10:17 AM
This isn't nearly as good as your first post.
Re: Someday by moonlightdance	Dovina 17.255.240.138	14-Jul-04/10:29 AM
Verses 1 and 2 good. Verse 3 weak. Verse 4 doesn't make sense.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	wilco 66.162.22.123	14-Jul-04/11:32 AM
I was turned off by the length of this from someone I hav'nt read before, but now I'm glad I read it anyway. Some of them are better than other (particularly, I think, Zin, Enough and Squeeze) but overall, very good. I'm impressed.
Re: Drinking Knowledge by gregsamsa222	wilco 66.162.22.123	14-Jul-04/11:35 AM
I think I would like this better if I had read it before the Zin/ poem. Maybe you set the bar too high and now I want it all to be that good. Still, not bad and better than most of what I've read today.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 66.162.22.123	14-Jul-04/11:38 AM
Find some of that emotion from your first post and use it. I know now that you've got the talent, but you've got to at least try. I know, sometimes you just want to get something posted and you think...hey, I'll change it later..I do it too..but well..nevermind.