| Re: swallow it by anonandonandon |
patty t 24.156.158.81 |
14-Jul-04/9:45 PM |
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a darn sight better than voicing her swallows
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some deleted user 68.122.140.11 |
15-Jul-04/10:01 AM |
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Beautifully done. You paint quite a picture here.
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| Re: Dawn Jig by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
15-Jul-04/6:18 AM |
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This is haunting enough to send a shiver down Christopher Reeves spine. 1--1
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Shuushin 147.154.235.51 |
15-Jul-04/6:23 AM |
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How's that whole "better man" thing workin for ya?
God is watching, my friend - God is watching.
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| Re: Lincolnshire by longships |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
15-Jul-04/7:25 AM |
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Lincolnshire looks like a poo splattered tramp after a night on the gas which has been ironed as flat as crystal's chest.
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fevriere 62.254.128.6 |
15-Jul-04/9:14 AM |
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Like it. Nice form. Odd but could work, given tweaks from experts.
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| Re: One Nation Under God by GAC |
jauser 63.202.235.108 |
15-Jul-04/9:25 AM |
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I don't know I think it's good but then the God part kills it.
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edpeterson 68.79.6.59 |
15-Jul-04/9:31 AM |
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estomos should be estamos
y lo encontro...encontro should be encuentro or encontraste unless you mean he, she or it found it, in which case...encontro'
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.22 |
15-Jul-04/9:32 AM |
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Line 9 will never happen if you let the candles burn to cake. Blow them out with one breath.
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.22 |
15-Jul-04/9:41 AM |
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YOU WILL NOT THE LAST WORD
Huh? You don't do typos. So, I'm missing something.
-9- until I get the point beyond the obvious.
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| Re: A Perverted Poet's Confession. by SupremeDreamer |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.22 |
15-Jul-04/10:04 AM |
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I was going to give it a -10-. But after I noticed EP gave it a nine, I decided that he might have more enzyte, I mean, insight.-9-
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.22 |
15-Jul-04/9:54 AM |
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Lines that need work:
siempre me ama
Cuando mi cabeza vola a nuestro futura
Y lo encuentro con todo de mÃ
En tus sueños, bailas con migo
Como en mis sueños yo bailo con tigo
Great effort.-9-
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.233.22 |
15-Jul-04/10:20 AM |
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I feel odd being in such august commenting company. Just proves that poetry crosses all lines, especially the line between the sane and the not. By the way, using that word 'latent' on this site is an invitation to latex nights spent in dark fecal caves.
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| Re: swallow it by anonandonandon |
?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.123.196 |
14-Jul-04/4:26 PM |
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I find this crude and offensive.
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| Re: Yesterday is gone tomorrow is today by singinkygal |
nicole081083 216.145.76.163 |
14-Jul-04/2:07 PM |
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Normally I would say "I love it, you're very talented" but since everything that's happened lately, I just want to say I'm sorry, but you're still very talented, and I love you
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sanity 80.43.109.18 |
14-Jul-04/2:08 PM |
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I think the edit maybe could do with a little editing, still very nice
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| Re: Eros, and Psycho by horus8 |
sanity 80.43.109.18 |
14-Jul-04/2:10 PM |
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| Re: One Lump Or Two? by OneFingerAnswer |
sanity 80.43.109.18 |
14-Jul-04/2:12 PM |
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Liked this one................
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?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.123.196 |
14-Jul-04/4:04 PM |
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Stop trying to pretend you know anything about James Joyce.
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?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.123.196 |
14-Jul-04/4:25 PM |
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Is this about tossing off? The last four lines especially make me think so.
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