Re: Ago by Enkidu	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	16-Jul-04/8:57 AM
its a good start
regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	16-Jul-04/9:02 AM
good emotion
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	15-Jul-04/7:50 PM
Drive on, Bro!
Re: You are my very Heart by donmiguel1960	edwardo 161.184.67.196	15-Jul-04/10:20 PM
i like that the last line is out of meter and out of rhyme, however the ametered fourth line feels somewhat awkward; thematically, no comment, a classic ode
Re: Ode to the bun (Day 11) by jdc	edwardo 161.184.67.196	15-Jul-04/10:22 PM
*sob* beautiful *sniff* just beautiful.
Re: Ode to the bun (Day 11) by jdc	jdc 203.167.234.194	15-Jul-04/11:16 PM
Thanks for the heartfelt sentiment, touching really,sniff * and all for Poetry day today in little ol NZ
Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	fevriere 62.254.128.6	16-Jul-04/1:26 AM
I dunno, it was a bit stupid but could be brilliant if you altered the last stanza. I spose.
Re: The Beautiful Chase by smlink84	fevriere 62.254.128.6	16-Jul-04/1:27 AM
No love for this verse.
Re: Ephemeral by shit	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	16-Jul-04/9:00 AM
consider changing the last stansa
regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	16-Jul-04/9:02 AM
writing what you feel is good
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	15-Jul-04/11:08 AM
Good, but I fail to see how the choppy line divisions add anything to the impact. A well-expressed thought.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.35	15-Jul-04/11:13 AM
Gregsamsa222, you think this is much worse? I am inclined to agree, I like the idea of the length of an arm from the previous edit and nothing else. So I put it in. Kind of want to move on now.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	15-Jul-04/11:27 AM
I like not knowing who created whom in the first few verses. Man creating god in his image kinda thing. Then it seems the ALL CAPS one is god. Then toward the end, (lower case) seems calling god Pencil Child. It's a blggle of uncertainty, which this whole issue is about, and seems centered on the line, "definitions come easy to definers." Second to last line, how about, YOU WILL NOT. THE LAST WORD.
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 24.156.158.81	15-Jul-04/1:10 PM
the "spoil it" line spoiled it for you? :-) appropriate
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 24.156.158.81	15-Jul-04/1:14 PM
the line breaks are a bit arbitrary-- but i think it helps in reading aloud (or under your breath). at least for me; i wrote it how i would talk it.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	15-Jul-04/1:19 PM
INSIPID This is more mating call than poem.
Re: Sacrament by Dovina	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	15-Jul-04/5:40 PM
what kind of sick poetry is this?
Re: Sacrament by Dovina	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	15-Jul-04/5:55 PM
Nice. not sure you need the first line of the last stanza. maybe add " always" after "She does it"
Re: Sacrament by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 63.206.235.145	15-Jul-04/7:26 PM
Seems like you sucked one poet into taking the position you sought-- Open fly hook with a plastic jesus hanging from a fishing line of gold nylon. Reel 'im in, Dovina. Flop him onto the deck and hit him on the head with a bowling pin. Then multiply him with your loaves. Ah men!
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.6.59	15-Jul-04/10:54 AM
nuestro futura should be nuestro futuro.