regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	4-Jul-04/8:53 AM
You have a very passionate heart
Re: Mother nature's creation (Terza Rima sonnet) by sanity	SupremeDreamer 204.31.161.7	4-Jul-04/9:10 AM
In all honesty, I must ask: wheres the fire, and why do I feel so limp? Take my five and be gone!
Re: Tapestry Years by Quarton	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/10:00 AM
What a great future! I think even the footprints in time blow away. A tapestry carefully woven and inevitibly unraveled. Please see my comment on Time's End.
Re: When by Cairsten	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.22	4-Jul-04/10:27 AM
I would have given up to two teeth I have left to have written such a poem. Anyone want to trade two teeth for a blender?
Re: Translation by Dovina	Quarton 12.217.221.61	4-Jul-04/11:44 AM
This is really quite a lovely little poem. I love the last three stanzas and my only suggestion is the third stanza. IMO, it doesn't quite flow as well as the rest of the poem. Still, it's exceptional as is. Good stuff and a solid nine.
Re: Translation by Dovina	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.79.187	4-Jul-04/2:28 PM
You seem to be suggesting there is some merit in an idea that can only be adequately articulated in one language. What buncombe. A meaningful statement can be expressed in any comprehensive language, such as English, and any information lost in the translation can only be meaningless, emotive hogwash.
Re: Fancy by reanna	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.79.187	4-Jul-04/2:34 PM
This poem is utterly unintelligible - the unmistakable hallmark of excellent poetry!!!!1
Re: Tapestry Years by Quarton	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.79.187	4-Jul-04/2:36 PM
A think of life as being more of a sort of crochet.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 204.31.164.248	3-Jul-04/9:18 PM
I'm running on mental fumes, so I'll be brief an to the mother-fucking point: bloated. You could make this into a haiku. Over-elaborated language applied with careless abandon. The analogy with "the itsy bitsy spider" causes me to start reciting that cursed ditty in the middle of your piece and is also much too fucking weak for what your trying to express. Stop gilding the goddamn glitter and fucking put some intelligence and poetic common-sense into it. No Vote. Good Day.
Re: The Western World by mrpresident	sanity 80.43.173.252	4-Jul-04/1:06 AM
I really like this, it tells of someone who is stuck maybe in a dead end job and just ants to be free........ Wobderful............
Re: Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha	fevriere 62.254.128.6	4-Jul-04/2:06 AM
Loved things like ": a knife", but please uncensor the beeps, as it were, it's like being at a clown party to be punctuated like this.
regarding some deleted poem...	sanity 80.43.173.252	4-Jul-04/3:47 AM
I must say, the language from the previous commentor was uncalled for, although slightly overdone, I would say this has the potential if edited to be a really good poem.....................
Re: War of kites and fireflies by fevriere	richa 81.178.242.35	4-Jul-04/5:34 AM
Like this too, the incense bit was confusing yes. And 'The almost-steel night thieves gold.' I can see where you are going but as a single sentence is difficult to grasp. But yes did I say I like it.
Re: Your sad goodbye by sanity	richa 81.178.242.35	4-Jul-04/5:37 AM
Cute enough nice sounds, the last two lines of each verse are a nice innovation.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.35	4-Jul-04/5:43 AM
Groovy, of course the convention of a haiku is to have two inextricably linked images. Here the link is between the body of the poeme and the title I think.
Re: War of kites and fireflies by fevriere	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/8:15 AM
I love this. "War" doesn't seem right though for kites praying of fireflies. The fireflies can only try to dart away. Then as "letters" of birds reel above, it seems some connection with the first line is needed. Like "razed haze of high English summer"
Re: Your sad goodbye by sanity	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/8:21 AM
I like the repeated line "Clouds above forming" with its shades of meaning, and rhyming lines 2 and 4. There must be a name for this. "Echoes as we part" or "Your sad goodbyes to me"
Re: summers' dream by sanity	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/8:23 AM
Sane, yes. Interesting, sorta.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/8:32 AM
Itsy Bitsy spider climbed up the water spout. It's a childhood tune a lot of us remember, and can be used to show the good thing you are attempting. Cutting this down to size and following the pattern of the song would make it a lot stronger.
Re: Chaos & his dreamchild (genesis) --Revised Edition-- by SupremeDreamer	Dovina 24.52.157.176	4-Jul-04/8:45 AM
I like it because it provokes thinking about the possible "illusion of order and substance." Try leaving out "then" in the last verse.