| regarding some deleted poem... |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
5-Jul-04/3:30 AM |
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| Re: blobby sums +-*/ by MR Blobby |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
5-Jul-04/3:35 AM |
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| Re: Worst Sex Ever by Brittanyy |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
5-Jul-04/2:01 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sanity 80.43.173.252 |
5-Jul-04/3:22 AM |
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actually this is classed as a senryu, the haiku is specifically for nature related poems, same syllable count, also the syllable count on this is wrong, you have 6 in the first line, 8 in the second and 5 in the third,
traditional haiku is 5,7,5 although condensed haiku are very popular, sorry, but this is not a haiku
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
5-Jul-04/1:59 AM |
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Glee
Agree
to my plea,
to let me,
empty,
me,
into thee.
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| Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
Brittanyy 152.163.253.1 |
4-Jul-04/6:00 PM |
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Hmm well..This poem is so bad it makes me feel better about my poems and for that I will grant you a...-5-
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| Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
Brittanyy 152.163.253.1 |
4-Jul-04/6:04 PM |
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I dont know who in their right mind would even consider giving THIS poem a 10..It's pure garbage..Thats all I can say..You Suck and Your Poem Sucks.. -0-
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| Re: Barometric pressure & true love (The prince of storms) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
Brittanyy 152.163.253.1 |
4-Jul-04/6:07 PM |
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I don't know why anyone would give this poem anything below a ten. Very good.
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Brittanyy 152.163.253.1 |
4-Jul-04/6:12 PM |
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I liked your poem..Very uh what's the word..Touching..Good job!
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| Re: Worst Sex Ever by Brittanyy |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.162 |
4-Jul-04/6:46 PM |
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Are you sure his name wasn't "Little Willie?"
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| Re: Worst Sex Ever by Brittanyy |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
4-Jul-04/9:00 PM |
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| Re: Order My Book, And $4.00 Will Go To Killing A Pop Star by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
zodiac 24.93.86.20 |
4-Jul-04/9:01 PM |
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Basia, Seals from Seals and Crofts, or the White Stripes. My check's in the mail. Don't let me down again.
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| Re: Tapestry Years by Quarton |
zodiac 24.93.86.20 |
4-Jul-04/9:06 PM |
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You're a lot better when you're not trying to talk science. Unfortunately, none of the sentences in this poem are really sentences.
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| Re: Love Redefined by Mus Vai |
arduinn 165.21.83.247 |
5-Jul-04/4:45 AM |
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well described.. some of the words are used too many times, though.. that kind of marred the poem
in L14, i suggest you change 'striketh my hand' to sth else as 'strike' means 'hit'...
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| Re: Love Slain by Mus Vai |
arduinn 165.21.83.247 |
5-Jul-04/4:55 AM |
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don't really feel the words.. but the way you write is good. keep writing.
I'm not sure why you used 'he' in stanza two when all throughout you used 'i'. (?)
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| Re: EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
sanity 80.43.173.252 |
5-Jul-04/7:20 AM |
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A very interesting piece, a style I have not seen before, are we saying what we would like for dinner? hehehehe......... very funny.............
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| Re: Order My Book, And $4.00 Will Go To Killing A Pop Star by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
edpeterson 68.79.1.86 |
5-Jul-04/8:26 AM |
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that's it.. I'm buyin one
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| Re: Your sad goodbye by sanity |
?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.79.187 |
4-Jul-04/2:38 PM |
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I like the way you use clouds as a metaphor for the human condition.
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| Re: Recycled Stardust by Quarton |
?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.79.187 |
4-Jul-04/2:49 PM |
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Hello. Perhaps I can shed some light on this matter. I have a degree in science from Strathclyde Univesity, and I can confirm that:
a) This poem is wrong
b) Science is true.
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| Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass |
Brittanyy 152.163.253.1 |
4-Jul-04/5:55 PM |
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Ok this poem was just a bad attempt to be funny and well...It's not..Nice try champ better luck next time..
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