regarding some deleted poem...	pain killer 217.159.74.253	28-Jun-04/1:10 PM
oh deary deary me...honk...god's strife strikes again with an utterly predicatable ugly fat woman rant...intimidates small men indeed..oh come on...there's nothing wrong with skinny women you know...just as there's also nothing wrong with fat women (or men) or indeed ugly women (or men)....but you're not saying anything new...fat women envy skinny women...like so what...fashion magazines promote skinny...junk food promotes fat... and if you're that pissed about being fat do something about it woman and stop whinging...the choice is yours...if you're happy being fat (and why shouldn't you be) then for god's sake give it a rest...but there's nothing fantastic about having large thighs that rub together...it means you eat too much and lack self discipline and probably you don't like yourself too much either really...leave the skinny women alone eh...after all, you can't be too rich or too skinny, or so some nutter somewhere said...what next? the world bank oppresses third world nations?, Mcdonalds destroys rain forests? all men are fascist sexist pigs and potential rapists?...this is very poor...wibble
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/7:45 AM
What message does it impart? Weak.
Re: Tough by Dovina	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	28-Jun-04/7:47 AM
"still not shaving, unwhiskered" a wonderful, telling line.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/7:48 AM
I like the last line and wish all of the lines pointed to it. Most of them do, but not all.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/7:50 AM
Too much rhyme, not enough content.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/7:52 AM
Distinctly average
Re: Break by Torok	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/7:53 AM
Just a preachy thing that doesn't get at any of the problems you say "we" must solve.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/8:02 AM
I like the "fragrances triggered by sounds" verse. I don't know if these are things found written in the margin a a Bible or if the blades of grass and flowers are foung pressed there. Still, I like the touch of my eyes upon these words
regarding some deleted poem...	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	28-Jun-04/9:09 AM
i liked it, -8-
Re: Sustained by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.232.105	28-Jun-04/9:18 AM
Never, never, never end a poem with a word that ends in -ing. It weakens the impact. What were you thinking? Oh, gerunds, too, are words you should not be using. -10- I found the poem to my liking.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.21.177	28-Jun-04/9:47 AM
spelling errors detract.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.21.177	28-Jun-04/9:49 AM
what??? how can we dance with all this prattling on about evil and righteousness?
Re: Rosalía de Castro: When I was born by Sasha	god'swife 4.232.210.180	28-Jun-04/11:07 AM
You're translations astound me. This reads beautifully. It makes me feel...good.
Re: Drunk and Fucked Up by wilco	god'swife 4.232.210.180	28-Jun-04/11:11 AM
The 'it' in the the second verse, what is 'it'? There's no correlation. I particulary like the aurora & the cigarettes.
Re: Sonnetias by MacFrantic	god'swife 4.232.210.180	28-Jun-04/11:18 AM
the first and last lines aare great, but all that ramble inbetween...oy.
Re: Origins by Doug	horus8 24.130.62.63	28-Jun-04/1:09 PM
"The Passion Of Napkin" By Mel Jizzbon Napkin was our spiritual leader. He died on Uranus for the sins of your mouth. Napkin was a two ply savior Until one ply went away leaving him all alone on Uranus Napkin folded up and set sail into the sea, from Uranus. It was there that he broke the fish and heeled the bread. Amen.
Re: Every Second, Waking Eternity by TheVoiceless	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/6:18 AM
A bubbling mess of green left by a 3 year old on the carpet of a close relative.
Re: Just One More Time by KatieKaBoom	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/6:21 AM
I should smite your face with a mighty cudgel for such a terrible poem. However as you remind me of the Katie to whose memory I still cling, like a pair of pants to an old man's crotch, I award you a fairly indifferent -7-
regarding some deleted poem...	Torok 62.252.0.6	28-Jun-04/6:48 AM
how horrible , i study geography and have just read pages and pages about alluvium which is just about the dullest thing anyone can do
Re: your best friend by New Life Drug	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Jun-04/7:43 AM
Missing someone. Not very well told.