Re: Ayudame (Help Me) by | Broken |	zodiac 65.161.41.48	27-Jun-04/7:02 AM
Why on earth are you saying 'ayudame' instead of 'help me' or even 'tolong saya'? Is it because, since you don't speak Spanish very well, 'ayudame' sounds deep and kind of beautiful, while the English and Malay versions sound bland and vaguely adolescent?
regarding some deleted poem...	Rodavlas 141.151.56.31	27-Jun-04/10:12 AM
hmm..smooth.
Re: Tough by Dovina	richa 81.178.206.232	27-Jun-04/1:39 PM
Not sure the leap from subservient to motherly is a logical one. Don't like alpha-male it is inelegant. The time in this is confusing. You talk of how you knew him in high school then claim many years on he is still not shaving.
Re: Death, last resort of protection by TheVoiceless	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/6:15 AM
The most terrible congealed piece of phlegm ever to have been laid down under the guise of "poetry".
Re: Origins by Doug	richa 81.178.206.232	27-Jun-04/1:54 PM
First verse does not make a whole lot of sense. 1) Who is this new squaw the past has forgotten, how does past have a wife. 2) To consumate their raven joining-- 'their' can only refer to the squaw and the past. So how come they are being joined when his new squaw has been forgotten. 3) How can was ever be new, it is the past. Verse 2, talking about christ as an abstraction invented by people to fulfill a need is just trite. It has been said a million times before, and offers a side of the argument but no insight.
Re: Ayudame (Help Me) by | Broken |	arduinn 165.21.83.240	27-Jun-04/6:28 AM
first line of second stanza.. i think it shld be 'lied to'... but as i said before... i like it... agree with shin shuu tt the use of said word made it better...
Re: Flower of Lebanon by donmiguel1960	arduinn 165.21.83.240	27-Jun-04/6:39 AM
conjured a pretty picture when i read it..
Re: Girlz by liljsmith87	arduinn 165.21.83.240	27-Jun-04/6:50 AM
a number of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.. maybe after you edit this and write something better.. i might just change my mind about my vote
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 216.170.21.116	27-Jun-04/6:32 PM
A. This totally kicks ass, and B. I'm so thankfull you did this because now I can close my books and go back to the brain dead previously scheduled programming of life. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	27-Jun-04/9:22 PM
"clam casino" alone, is beyond redemption. Way beyond. 9
Re: your best friend by New Life Drug	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/10:44 PM
He must mean alot.
Re: Y Tylluanod by Blurgerocity	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/10:48 PM
Umm, that's not latin, none of it. Confiteor natura et terra. But the english parts sounded good to my intoxicated mind.
Re: Tough by Dovina	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/10:51 PM
Guess you grew up on him.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/10:55 PM
I would try to take a walk. You write of nothing but love and infatuation, try to expand your horizons, there is so much more to life. And poetry.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/10:56 PM
See?
Re: Desert Rain by donmiguel1960	sliver 63.190.73.67	27-Jun-04/11:03 PM
Ahhh metaphore. A region I have not achieved. l.19, scent? Stanza 6, I think agai is abused,Just delete the second one, it isn't needed. Hearts are sad, yearning for the healing to return. By the way, thanks for the votes and comments my friend.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/1:14 AM
Your poems seem to have become more and more of a justification for why it will be okay for you to lose your hyman with your new boyfriend.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jun-04/6:16 AM
In the words of the late, great Rockmage (QV) "Could be cute but isn't"
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 204.31.166.248	27-Jun-04/5:25 AM
Beautiful in its cold mellow rage. Blessed with ten.
Re: Psilocybin, and the Tale of a Happy Stoner by ARTIE	SupremeDreamer 204.31.166.248	27-Jun-04/5:39 AM
trod on oh whispering vitalist. nine.