Re: Someday Soon by Drunk Russian Poet	zodiac 65.161.41.48	26-Jun-04/9:54 PM
Why did you stop being nowhereman?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	26-Jun-04/10:14 PM
Yes!!! You actually listened to my suggestion!
Re: upon driving through rural Washington by david	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/3:35 PM
"distant whelm" is very nice. quite a few nice bits in here as I read it again. I hope I don't seem to ignore those when I say much of it is smothered by one, two and three letter crap words. Try a version without them for your own viewing, tell me if you don't like it.
Re: Origins by Doug	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/3:37 PM
no spaces bordering the dash - and I like that line alot. Is this the same as before? Or a similar technique?
Re: Interrogation #1086637 by MacFrantic	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/3:40 PM
2 spelling errors take away from it: consciouseness, akward. fine otherwise.
Re: Origins by Doug	Dovina 64.173.77.254	26-Jun-04/3:49 PM
Verses 1&2 are what marriage of an experienced couple is. I like it a lot, can laugh with it. Christ seems extra though. When they conceive a subtle light and give birth to charisma, I'm guessing, but there's chemistry in the now and was.
Re: Desert Rain by donmiguel1960	Dovina 64.173.77.254	26-Jun-04/3:58 PM
The rare rain is a good metaphor for something, and nicely described, but I'm loseing what it is. And who is Miguel Antonio Francis?
Re: A story of recognition by DeadtotheWorld	Dovina 64.173.77.254	26-Jun-04/4:28 PM
In spite of a dozen or more spelling and grammar problems, I think I got the point.
regarding some deleted poem...	MacFrantic 198.81.26.16	26-Jun-04/6:33 PM
The effort is there, but for something so moving it lacks...lacks...motion. *7*
Re: Stuffy by horus8	MacFrantic 198.81.26.16	26-Jun-04/6:41 PM
Maybe the feature song of a sitcom-style broadway play written by a gay Edgar Poe...but other than that, quite normal, if not abnormal. Wait! Oh. *8.1*
Re: Origins by Doug	horus8 24.130.62.63	26-Jun-04/7:03 PM
My iguana went all listless on me, and I had to give him a mineral colonic... I was very charismatic about it.
Re: SIMPLE by shazpen	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/7:20 PM
quite nice - I would have made a few different line break choices, but really - a small thing.
regarding some deleted poem...	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	26-Jun-04/10:23 PM
Hey ... I really like this poem .... Very deep yet so real .. Thumbs up! (",*)
Re: Black Rose by arduinn	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	26-Jun-04/10:40 PM
Considering the fact that you got the inspiration of writing this piece from 'In the Forest Of The Night'.. I admire that .. I like it a lot and thanks for writing it in my book ... Heheh. (",@)
Re: Lost by arduinn	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	26-Jun-04/10:50 PM
It's good .. thumbs up! ... You managed to make others feel your emotions and you explained the poem well.
Re: Ayudame (Help Me) by | Broken |	DR Limerick 213.48.74.44	26-Jun-04/11:48 PM
kum und sit on my sofer let ust talk about diz 2 limerickes a day should maken you feel mutch better!
Re: The Sea (revised) by Dovina	DR Limerick 213.48.74.44	26-Jun-04/11:53 PM
Yar i liken diz I hope you wor a condome?
Re: Ayudame (Help Me) by | Broken |	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	27-Jun-04/4:50 AM
the use of Ayudame is the best part of this; elevates it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/3:29 PM
I like the wedge and the verse doesn't seemed cramped to fit it. The significance of this 72 year old man, other than his affinity to disabled women, is lost on me.
Re: Absolution by Drunk Russian Poet	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	26-Jun-04/3:31 PM
The gene pun is horrible, DRP - I just can't get past that. You may very well be saying some profundity - but if so, you have a clown nose on while doing it.