Re: Tattooed by DR Limerick	MR Blobby 213.48.74.138	25-Jun-04/10:28 AM
BLOBBY BLOBBY
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/4:59 PM
Shut up, fucking chew toy.
Re: Stuffy by horus8	Shardik 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/5:52 PM
"You're the salesman, you make sales."
Re: ILLusion in Falsity by Sugar Victim	boldsilence 68.11.251.86	25-Jun-04/6:27 PM
I like this. It's harsh and blunt, but I like that it's straight-forward. The rhymes don't really distract the reader eithre, especially at the end. At the beginning, they were kind of shoddy, but it's okay, because the poem was good. I really enjoyed this. I hope to see another one like it... -Nichole- P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at one of my poems too.
Re: Nothing by psikosis	boldsilence 68.11.251.86	25-Jun-04/6:28 PM
Very true...
Re: There was . . . by baphomet	boldsilence 68.11.251.86	25-Jun-04/6:32 PM
I don't like the form this was written in at all. It makes it seem unlike poetry. If you had just written it in a different form, I think that would have made it a lot better. My rating won't reflect that, though. Just for future reference. -Nichole- P.S. - I'd appreciate it if you'd read and review one of my poems in return.
Re: Absolution by Drunk Russian Poet	Dovina 24.52.157.176	25-Jun-04/9:29 AM
I take it as a kind of priestly advice for gaining "Absolution" for having committed the perceived sin af adultry, advising the woman to tell her child his breeding. She questions whether to tell, apparently because of guilt feelings. The last verse is provocatively ambiguous because we don't know whether the "ears" are the child's or the world's. Good.
Re: Center Of The Universe by Dovina	MR Blobby 213.48.74.138	25-Jun-04/10:21 AM
Blobby blob
Re: Sustained by Dovina	MR Blobby 213.48.74.138	25-Jun-04/10:22 AM
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regarding some deleted poem...	DR Limerick 213.48.74.138	25-Jun-04/10:32 AM
Yar dis ist a goot limerick take two a day thats vot i say!!
Re: The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>	moonlightdance 69.134.115.231	25-Jun-04/12:35 PM
the beautiful thing about the english language is that it is so diversified and evolving. poem can easily be one syllable or two. i don't see the big issue here, though i am rooting for two, just because it's funnier. also amelia: two syllables or three?
Re: Loving You More Each Day by Katrina	moonlightdance 69.134.115.231	25-Jun-04/12:38 PM
normally acrostic poems suck, but this was really great! like dark angel said, you really phrase perfectly the feeling of love
Re: Someday Soon by Drunk Russian Poet	Dovina 24.52.157.176	25-Jun-04/3:36 PM
A mysterious kinda thing, I won't even say all the interpretations it could have or the problems with them. Let it be for the intuition.
Re: Mother by jacqui	boldsilence 68.11.251.86	25-Jun-04/3:47 PM
interesting...
Re: Love poem (on sense and experience) by thavimatola	markmarkmarkmark 81.153.235.105	25-Jun-04/4:23 PM
Lots of good things here - just needs a touch more to hold it together for me.
Re: deep by bxjay170	markmarkmarkmark 81.153.235.105	25-Jun-04/4:25 PM
spelling and grammar aren't what poetry is about, but the lack of them distracts from the message. All that aside, I could see the feeling behind this. Avoid cliche - deeper _than_ the sea, is not a fresh image.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/4:46 PM
smegma
Re: Tattooed by DR Limerick	horus8 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/4:47 PM
Fickle Cocca 10!
Re: Someday Soon by Drunk Russian Poet	horus8 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/4:48 PM
"breaks upon his face" WARM... I bet. poop. pull out your chisel and fez.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	25-Jun-04/4:55 PM
A stretch of spunk from afar took out the right wheel of my car 'n Sent my asswagon a soar 'ver the sheep that I shored that's going to sure leave a scar