Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	Doug 205.188.116.140	23-Jun-04/7:02 PM
One of your best poems.-9-
Re: Tulips for Penelope by zenhaircut	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	23-Jun-04/7:16 PM
Artfully done, but a tad long for a first exposure. I would need to be a fan to commit to such a lengthy verse, and as it is, I admit to skimming toward the end there. I hope the others are more accessible - but this one; very nice anyway. (a few typos, btw - a quick spell check will reveal them)
Re: Small Town, January by zenhaircut	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	23-Jun-04/7:18 PM
good one.
Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jun-04/10:41 PM
Now that I've calmed down from my little catfight with god'swife (and by the way I appreciate your comments there) I'll say something about your poem. I like the feel of it. That's not astute, but it's the kinda thing that gets you through the night. Cheers.
Re: A Surrender of the Heart by Torok	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jun-04/10:45 PM
Why would she feel hate? She is content alone. He has problems, but the last line doesn't seem to work for her.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/4:47 PM
The first line of the second stanza would sound better if it were "Huge creatures lumbered here once, lowed their song", with the line broken wherever you want. The word "utterly" needs replacing more than "huge" does.
Re: Getting the Cool Kids To Like Me by the codeine kid	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/5:24 PM
You retard. This poem is a soggy Christmas-sock full of errors. First, you've gotten god'swife and me hopelessly confused. We are not the same person. Second, neither of us said either of the things you attribute to (one of) us, you fuckwit. god'swife said "I'm going through big changes right now and a kind of rebuilding of my self knowledge". I said "I want the cool kids to like me". If you're going to mash our quotes together like some hideous cheesy prawne-log, at least use our real words. As it happens, I wouldn't be caught dead saying either "wanna" or "hang with", both of which I consider embarassingly 'pop culture'. Third, your a fuckwit. Fourth, as it happens, I WAS bullied at grade-school, but now I'm a 'real-world success story' after only seven years of Accredited Poetry School. Last Harvest Festival, the townfolk voted me King Cornhusk. Fifthly, my definition of poetry is the correct one. Yours is not. And Lastly, your a cock. I've never said everyone who lives in China is a Chinaman. Anyone knows Tibetians and Mongoloids also inhabit the Chinkish territories. -10-
Re: Skuld Resurrected by SupremeDreamer	wilco 24.176.102.131	23-Jun-04/4:11 PM
How 'bout "skuldouggery".
Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer	Doug 205.188.116.140	23-Jun-04/2:24 PM
I quite agree!You and your poetry are actualized shit.I understand the jest of your statement,but that's no excuse to lower yourself to the same level.Besides I highly doubt you know anything about the essence of blackness, being the pasty scotsman you are.Good job jackass you created nine lines of artless, barbarous shit.
Re: Insurance Frauds by skaskowski	Dovina 17.255.240.6	23-Jun-04/2:29 PM
Anytime you can take two apparently unrelated things and make one a metaphor for the other, you're into the dancefloor of poetry. Some of your wording is hard to follow, but what you are doing is not. I'll take that anyday over a perfectly formed poem with nothing to say.
Re: Skuld Resurrected by SupremeDreamer	Doug 205.188.116.140	23-Jun-04/2:36 PM
How about "Go fuck yourself motherfucker,goddamn cunt-bitch-WHORE"? Brilliant!
Re: That Girl Before by Miggy	some deleted user 205.188.116.84	23-Jun-04/2:54 PM
awesome
Re: The Riddle of Creation by Dovina	wilco 24.176.102.131	23-Jun-04/3:46 PM
That's a nice little fairy-tale, but I don't buy it.
Re: Insurance Frauds by skaskowski	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/3:58 PM
And you misspelled innuendo.
Re: Insurance Frauds by skaskowski	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/3:58 PM
re "At any moment the climb turns. And you're falling down but still aware of the handles you're passing up." Are you just using 'you' to be chatty, or are you seriously assuming we're all the same kind of self-absorbed impotents that your narrator is?
Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer	wilco 24.176.102.131	23-Jun-04/4:03 PM
Get the hose Marge, them pasty Scotsmen done got in the trash again.
Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco	Dovina 17.255.240.6	23-Jun-04/4:08 PM
I prefer hyphenation so you may want to court elsewhere. I Dov- in- a- pond, and none of them knew me.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/4:16 PM
Is it AN ILLEGAL HOUSE-PRAWNE???!!?!!/1
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	23-Jun-04/4:18 PM
Another enormous let-down.
Re: Heroin by zenhaircut	Dovina 17.255.240.6	23-Jun-04/2:22 PM
I like the thrust of this poem, its persistance toward the end, its showing how cynics' needles hurt like the real ones. You also run the course fron infatuation to dissillusion with haroin. Good. "There is no antidote for lonliness except ill hope"