Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/12:47 AM
ZODIAC: "It reflects poorly on your kind." DOVINA: zodiac's "saying I am merely one of a "kind".
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/12:46 AM
re: "and for that you unjustly poked criticism." No, I really meant your response to my comment. I was just afraid of it being misplaced, so I tagged it on your last comment on that string. Sorry. re: The rest. Jesus Christ. You're a long way from that.
Re: Girly by Dovina	wilco 24.165.207.93	4-Feb-05/7:29 PM
Not your best, but since I know why you wrote it, it kind of makes me laugh.
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	Dovina 12.72.11.186	4-Feb-05/4:47 PM
Good. Try omitting "Driving along fast" and "my" in the line above.
Re: A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	4-Feb-05/1:47 PM
could do without the "so", and "that", still very nice.
Re: a comment on Waiting for October by wilco	tadpole 24.55.116.186	4-Feb-05/1:31 PM
Ok, yeah, watch it and I'll vote. Here's the info: The Red Balloon (1956) about it: "The late French filmmaker Albert Lamorisse made this classic, 1956 short work about a lonely little Parisian boy (Pascal Lamorisse) befriended by a large red balloon, which seems to have a will of its own. As with his preceding short, 1952's White Mane, Lamorisse took home a grand prize from the Cannes Film Festival for The Red Balloon, and the latter film also won an Academy Award. There have been some stimulating pieces of film criticism (some pro, some con) written about the aesthetics of this little movie over the years, but there's no question it makes for a touching, allegorical piece always certain to prompt conversations among viewers of any age." --Tom Keogh
Re: love's jealousy by singinkygal	Dovina 17.255.240.6	4-Feb-05/12:57 PM
A few too many words. Try scratching - love's, fills (make it fill or scratch fills my body) hatred springs to life, evil, again unreservedly, devastation.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.6	4-Feb-05/12:46 PM
I'm hurt that you don't care whether I hate trolls. Maybe I'll write a paradelle showing how despicable trolls are, and I'll do it to change your opinion on whether I care. Would I then be showing? No, I'd just be telling in another way. I like telling, and I like showing, and I hate rules, including somebody's list entitled, "tools of the poet."
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	richa 81.178.239.228	4-Feb-05/10:23 AM
The 'show don't tell dictum' means that the poet must find images, or surface if you will, to convey what may be quite abstract. Now you can say 'you know that thing called hate they talk about, I feel that about trolls'. From this we know you hate trolls. Unfortunately we don't care because no one wants to know what a poet thinks about trolls. If you do not use the tools of the poet you are just talking arse and expecting us to care.
Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	4-Feb-05/8:31 AM
What a lovely world you inhabit.
Re: a comment on My Time In Jail by Brittanyy	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	4-Feb-05/8:30 AM
dimtard.
Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee	Dovina 12.72.6.171	4-Feb-05/7:48 AM
Good story.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.6.171	4-Feb-05/7:44 AM
Did you not want to like it because you've been there. Oh, the last two lines are what it's about. :(
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.6.171	4-Feb-05/7:41 AM
I am so very, very sorry that you are so mistreated by racist nentwined. Go for empowerment! Stand up for your rights, maybe stand nude in a stadium for your rights. But I wont join you in that cause. If I'm nude in a stadium it is for reasons the man in the stands knows.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.6.171	4-Feb-05/7:35 AM
Zodiac: "It reflects poorly on your kind." Dovina: Yeasts are good at what they do.
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.6.171	4-Feb-05/7:30 AM
Your paraphrasing does not come across with its usual inaccuracy and therefore impossibility of apt response. No, I agree with your summary given its summary nature. My recent response was to richa’s comment and deviated from yours, and for that you unjustly poked criticism. Now to your most recent comment. The point of the poem is not to convince people of something. It is not to criticize their faith. It is to express feelings I personally have about God. The fact that my understanding of Him differs from those people who find Him a loving and caring God who wants to make His people happy by sending them to heaven via disaster is not my point. I want to understand God as He is, and this poem, I believe, is a step in that direction.
Re: a comment on My Time In Jail by Brittanyy	Brittanyy 64.12.117.5	4-Feb-05/6:22 AM
I was that night...
Re: My Time In Jail by Brittanyy	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	4-Feb-05/6:20 AM
Who says "coppers"? What are you living in a 1930's crime saga?
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.12	4-Feb-05/4:08 AM
I don't understand how anything you've said really responds to my comment above. Would you mind clarifying? If I get you right (and I'm not at all certain I do), things are heading in something like the following direction: DOVINA: People (should) find God a hard guy to like because he often crushes them like insects with little or no warning, and probably no concern on his part (cf. your poem). ZODIAC: But God knows those people are going to heaven, so he's not bound to care for their insectly earthly lives. DOVINA: Who says there's a heaven just because there's a God? ZODIAC: Most people. DOVINA: That's because people want to believe God made a heaven. Maybe he didn't. ZODIAC: Indeed maybe he didn't. It seems just as likely that he didn't as that he did. But considering that the point of this poem (or the only one I can imagine it having) is to make most people question why they think God is so swell (since he crushes people etc etc), then it's a bunk argument. Any person in the world put in that position is bound to say, Because he made a nice heaven for us to go to after we're crushed. Incidentally, I know I'm paraphrasing something awful above. Please, please don't make the gist of your response that I've paraphrased something. You and I both know perfectly well what was really said, and if we forget, we have the comments above to reread. If you do, I'm afraid I can't be your friend anymore. :-(
Re: Girly by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.12	4-Feb-05/3:51 AM
I have a feeling you think you're responding to someone on this site. Who? Have you read "A Room of One's Own"?