Re: a comment on Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/2:28 AM
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Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/2:23 AM
Why did she write it?
Re: a comment on Dying Abroad by zodiac	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:22 AM
Maybe "wimpling" - an ace word.
Re: On Being Born by emilyowey	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:20 AM
Great. Are you really Emily Dickinson?
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:19 AM
I like the last line. I would probably rewrite everything else. Try including some poetry along the way, and maybe making a couple of real sentences.
Re: Clouds by dancin_n_da_moonlite	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:17 AM
The 'foil' and 'silver lining' part was cool. It doesn't make the rest of the poem worth it, though.
Re: rear view mirror by damianlow	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:15 AM
Have I seen you on "Taxicab Confessions"?
Re: a comment on Dying Abroad by zodiac	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/12:28 AM
Q: Does that "small rain" thing get you a lot of women? I bet it does. I came back the day after posting this to change the sibilant line. Then Shuushin said he liked it, and I thought how I haven't been nice enough to him recently. For yourself, consider it changed. The adjective could possibly be "whispering" instead. Or something such.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/12:10 AM
DOVINA: "It reflects poorly on your kind." ZODIAC: No, no. I'm asking when I've ever said "ONE OF A KIND" or "MERELY". What? I haven't said those words exactly? Then you've gotten the wrong idea about things. Now give it up.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/11:49 PM
Hey, ace conclusion. Now let's see if you can find where I've used either "one of a kind" or "merely" in any of my comments to you ever.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/11:47 PM
Once again, you've used the word 'merely' where I meant nothing of the sort. Even if you mean it as a joke (by now) stop. And get a fucking clue. I haven't just "heard that 'poetess' and 'girly' are not opposing", I've heard it from Virginia Woolf and a great many of the most respected feminist scholars in America. To use a metaphor you're bound to love, you're doing something like approaching Hank Aaron and saying "that's not a home run, a home run is when you stand naked on second base and trump into the upper bleachers" and then when he asks you why, trumping into his scared darkie face.
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.8.216	5-Feb-05/8:20 AM
Admittedly.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.8.216	5-Feb-05/8:17 AM
You see, since it's not obvious to you, the cliche "one of a kind" is grosely and always wrong for obvious reasons.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.8.216	5-Feb-05/8:15 AM
I predict I’ll say something about how irrelevant it is of you to say that because you’ve heard that "poetess" and "girly" are not opposing that makes this merely a girly poem. It’s the kind of thing you can be counted on to say. What I predict I’ll say is not at all unimaginable.
Re: Girly by Dovina	Shuushin 64.223.155.125	5-Feb-05/5:10 AM
kindof ogden nashy as the end there (not a bad thing).
Re: Pictures of June by wilco	Shuushin 64.223.155.125	5-Feb-05/5:08 AM
Hwy wilco - overall it has a nice presence, but it didn't sink in until the end. Feature or bug? I was thinking that each of those stanzas could be on their own, even expanded into more - then I hit the chorus and it gelled. So I guess you could go either way with it. consuming/consumes - I struggled with that a little. Did you try it the other way too?
Re: Concerto Chaotic by thepinkbunnyofdoom	fevriere 62.254.128.4	5-Feb-05/1:39 AM
I really do like it - the first stanza was definitely captivating, for the confident entrance and then the creeping of doubts. But call me ignorant.. It's not really.. Poetic. You're not hiding anything. And what you explain seems to go on a long time. I think there are lines here that are superfluous - they don't help so they drag. Like "into the shadows". Sounds very The Rasmus. At least forget the linebreak that makes it independent.
Re: a comment on Enrapture by fevriere	fevriere 62.254.128.4	5-Feb-05/1:13 AM
I had no idea - I always just thought an arabesque was a painful-looking but delicate stretch. Thank you!
Re: Girly by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/1:01 AM
As anybody who's read "A Room of One's Own" knows (and that's probably nearly everyone who knows anything), "poetess" and "girly" have never been considered opposing options for women. In fact, poetry is historically the domain of good domestic girls, being usually somewhat shallower and more maudlin than other literary forms, and also easier to write during soapopera commercials. That you don't already know this is yet another stain on your much besmirch'd reputation. I predict you'll say something about how this poem is not about girls and poetesses, but rather about something unrelated and at present unimaginable.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	5-Feb-05/12:49 AM
I don't need to go for empowerment. I'm empowered by birth, being a man and a White. Are the reasons "to fuck"?