Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.3.226	6-Feb-05/8:50 PM
Jessicazee is with me part way; Wilco is part way there; Shuushin’s Ogden Nash comparison is not a bad thing; Zodiac is befuddled as usual; but by Job, you’ve got it. At least what you say is lighthearted and heavy-handed is what I meant. I suppose it’s ok for people to get what they see in a poem, but it’s gratifying when somebody sees it the way I do. I see your point about the last four lines.
Re: just can't by shygirl1619	Goad 84.140.206.60	6-Feb-05/5:10 PM
A shy girl who was recently dumped On PR with her poetry jumped. We'll do nothing but damn her For spelling and grammar And rhyme have -- like love -- got her stumped.
Re: a comment on Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 65.54.97.193	6-Feb-05/3:22 PM
tuh.
Re: Nicholas Martin's last great paper by Bachus	Crakyamuni 65.54.97.193	6-Feb-05/3:00 PM
All this seems a little "unsettling" as do most beautiful things.
Re: My Time In Jail by Brittanyy	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:51 PM
love it.
Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:45 PM
I love your style, it is serene and surreal and smooth - although I am confused about the last line.
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:42 PM
I like it but the ending is elusive and not satisfying, please elaborate.
Re: black dog by wilco	daveslady 140.211.124.165	6-Feb-05/12:28 PM
poor little dog. Good poem.
Re: Girly by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.51	6-Feb-05/9:57 AM
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows: "but I’m better off girly than a poetess, surely this poem of mine doesn't seem to rhyme" It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
Re: a comment on An Ice Revelation by Nateislate	fevriere 62.254.128.4	6-Feb-05/8:57 AM
It is too.
Re: a comment on An Ice Revelation by Nateislate	Nateislate 68.51.106.137	6-Feb-05/8:34 AM
I agree, and I was. Nonetheless, the moment described was priceless.
Re: a comment on An Ice Revelation by Nateislate	Nateislate 68.51.106.137	6-Feb-05/8:33 AM
Indeed. It's a haiku, too.
Re: a comment on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	Goad 217.95.222.15	6-Feb-05/8:33 AM
I've an eight for my perfidy, how grand Though the rest of the poetry's judged bland perhaps it'd less bore you the Schnectadian to explore you -- can you more than the chickadee withstand?
Re: a comment on You took my half dozen by poodietat	poodietat 68.51.106.137	6-Feb-05/8:31 AM
Thanks for the comments. I had to look up Burkowskian. Good stuff from Burkowsky - I'm reading more, even as I type.
Re: a comment on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	Goad 217.95.222.15	6-Feb-05/8:11 AM
What a poet will do to stick to a form! With words play what tricks to the mold to conform! But it jusn't isn't fair - no! To harm a poor little helpless baby sparrow, One man's tale as a pome to perform.
Re: Thanks (Dovina) by jroday	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.226	6-Feb-05/5:09 AM
Lovely poem of thanks. Friends how many of us have them? ReAlLy!!!!
Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.226	6-Feb-05/5:04 AM
Hang in there! It will get better for you and your mother just believe, I know
Re: You took my half dozen by poodietat	Goad 217.95.222.15	6-Feb-05/4:53 AM
far more interesting than the posts it is in reaction to. Great fun as an in-joke on societate de wanker. But it also stands alone, with that Bukowskian last line.
Re: a comment on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/2:40 AM
How many real deathbeds have you seen? I'm not saying I could trump you or anything, I've just been under the impression that most people on deathbeds are unconscious, drug-addled, and rather bad-smelling. If you've been reading one of these as religious inclination, please let me know. - zodiac
Re: a comment on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/2:37 AM
It's obvious to anyone that -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. doesn't take issue with God, nor even his alter-ego Jesu. Who the fuck would? Oh, right. You would. He probably just takes issue with people's bumbling notions about God, like everybody does from time to time. So you're basically just failing to make the same distinction you accused me of failing to make on your poem "Psalm of Wonder". And, incidentally, showing the same lack of comprehension which haunts pretty much all of your God poems. Want to criticize people? Go right ahead! Want to criticize God? You'd do better shoving fiery coals up your snoot right now and saving yourself a wait. And besides, everyone knows God just trumps at all criticism.