Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.232.117	13-Jan-05/7:54 AM
Ya think?
Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	richa 81.178.241.233	13-Jan-05/6:38 AM
This is overpunctuated. It sounds less the team talk of a games master and more the team talk of an RSI inflicted Stephen Hawking.
Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	richa 81.178.241.233	13-Jan-05/6:37 AM
It is correct that players of the old 'games of ball' can be a tad coarse but to suggest gentlemen use the kind of immigrant slang employed in this poem I will not believe.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	richa 81.178.241.233	13-Jan-05/6:18 AM
The last verse seems a bit tacked on. The rest is very nice to read but you do know that people don't write like that anymore.
Re: Stopping at the oak (draft) by Caducus	zodiac 212.118.14.17	13-Jan-05/5:39 AM
1) Don't capitalise "Oak". 2) Don't put a period after it either. 3) Then don't capitalise "Laid". 4) Correctly punctuate "Nature's". 5) On second thought, don't say that at all; and don't rhyme "tomb" and "womb". 6) That reminds me: Don't rhyme "fire" and "pyre". 7) Punctuate after Frost. 8) Don't punctuate after pressed. 9) What's up with all the periods in that stanza anyway? And couldn't you have made at least one of those a full clause? 10) "You haunt me in the omen of banshees" doesn't make any sense. You'll try to explain it now. Don't. It still doesn't. That's your limit. Do you want more?
Re: a comment on Veins by helenwales	zodiac 212.118.14.17	13-Jan-05/5:32 AM
Thud.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	13-Jan-05/2:59 AM
Except that wouldn't be an improvement, you engorged member.
Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.220	12-Jan-05/11:13 PM
-10- The 'preverts' in line 13 is sheer genius. The only improvement I would add might be to change the last word from ball to balls.
Re: The Unsung Hero by Bhaskaryya	Dovina 12.72.4.207	12-Jan-05/10:13 PM
A good flow and a good point.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.4.207	12-Jan-05/10:05 PM
It flows nicely and contains some awsome images, but altogether, it lacks motive and is too broad. It fails to pinpoint any real life issue.
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	jauser 63.20.197.216	12-Jan-05/8:13 PM
damnit I thought the poeam was long, the comments is even longer
Re: a comment on A friend told me by RION12	RION12 64.136.26.226	12-Jan-05/5:39 PM
Thanks for likeing my poem and for sticking up for me. To me I don't care if my poetry is so called "truly poetic" as you say because I like writing poetry and that is all that matters. GOT IT!!!!!!! Thanks again Dovina.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	12-Jan-05/5:37 PM
this is great... 10
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	blacksoul 204.215.33.112	12-Jan-05/2:02 PM
Very nice
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	12-Jan-05/2:00 PM
nice
Re: Can't Fight No More by jroday	blacksoul 204.215.33.112	12-Jan-05/1:50 PM
I know this is just a poem, and no more than that. When we were growing up, you always told us not to give up no matter what. For the poem dad I give you a -10-,but if you have really given up I give you; which I believe is a lie. 00000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000
Re: Moon and History by kawakurdi	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	12-Jan-05/7:09 AM
Awesome!!!
Re: medieval myth by ThePariahDog	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	12-Jan-05/7:05 AM
Nice :)
Re: a comment on Veins by helenwales	Shuushin 70.16.213.129	11-Jan-05/10:55 PM
And the day is still young...
Re: a comment on Veins by helenwales	zodiac 212.118.11.30	11-Jan-05/10:20 PM
'"thud" implies a kind of finality' is my favorite thing on poemranker today.