Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	jroday 204.215.33.176	8-Jan-05/3:00 AM
You know I have felt like that many many times in my life. Which way should I go.
Re: Dying In The Corner by Zalev	PsydewaysTears 69.240.74.35	8-Jan-05/2:43 AM
Too rightly this one hit home... pleasantly flowing and darkly satisfying. I like it a lot. •°•Gregory James•°•
Re: Nightmares Of Yesterday by Zalev	PsydewaysTears 69.240.74.35	8-Jan-05/2:26 AM
The title's catchy. And I liked the intro and the final two stanzas... the rest of it though, kinda lost its flare somewhere admidst "mom said I was drunk" and "please stop my sin". Maybe I just wanted to be pulled more into your mind's reactions than just given a dictation of events.... and maybe some metaphorical images to bounce off of would've been nice too. And one of those tiny little umbrellas for my pina colada, if it's not too much trouble. •°•Gregory James•°•
Re: Fanboy by Blindpoetry	Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.63	7-Jan-05/8:34 PM
Nice :)
Re: a comment on Fanboy by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.11.192.79	7-Jan-05/2:59 PM
always traveling is sort of as an adjective.
Re: a comment on Johnny football painter by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.231.65	7-Jan-05/10:01 AM
Changed it a bit, thanks for the feed back.
Re: a comment on Let God Unwrite Itself by daggatolar	Crakyamuni 131.252.231.65	7-Jan-05/9:52 AM
This poem touches on a great deal of the metaphysical forces in written word, but in places I'm unsure of what to make of lines,(To "Stair" feelings capable of everything). It's good, feels genuine.
Re: Let God Unwrite Itself by daggatolar	Dovina 69.175.6.101	7-Jan-05/6:50 AM
A good start, using rite, but at the end where you change to "write" I lost the thing that seemed well staged - that we can rite out God. You seem to introduce the notion that god was written and can be unwritten too near to the end.
Re: Fanboy by Blindpoetry	Dovina 69.175.6.101	7-Jan-05/6:44 AM
Comma after Traveling?
Re: The Fear of Being and will not be forever by Prince of Void	daggatolar 80.179.102.34	7-Jan-05/6:29 AM
we are eternally condemned by itself to nothingness, and for this we need not hold our selves in pain and agony over this since before death we all are helpless, but least that death is incapable of taking away from us is LIFE,lets live it in full and in meaning to make the world a better place , indeed to "REBUILDING A NEW WORLD"for the whole of humanity , this for me is my poem....
Re: Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis. by SupremeDreamer	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	7-Jan-05/4:03 AM
hehe..10
Re: a comment on Betwixt and In Between by dougsoderstrom	ho_hum 129.169.158.91	7-Jan-05/2:54 AM
And there's more. http://www.poopreport.com/Ask/Content/whemying.html What made you think that a site called "poopreport" would give you serious lead on your "study". You have twice said that you are interested in this, but the question is why? You seem to be a very odd man.
Re: Johnny football painter by Crakyamuni	Shuushin 64.222.171.185	6-Jan-05/11:22 PM
carnivorous irreparably and, what the hell, tremulant... I like the word - I don't like it there. Maybe if I knew your work better I could more easily accept the reach of it. It has a nice feel/flavor to it overall, though.
Re: a comment on Affairs by Stacy Stewart	Stacy Stewart 67.51.232.76	6-Jan-05/11:03 PM
what is our world with out love and compassion? So w/ that being said when you find that one somebody and then they betray you we are back at square one again.... This is why I wrote the words downfall to man. As for the emotion leading up to this: "utteringthe words of complete chaos (I LOVE YOU) that ignites unholy thoughts (thinking of the other person), unveiling inner desires kept dormant in our sleep. Dreaming of worlds where the candles are lit and roses mean something to us." ( dreaming of being w/ the other person) for now the love is not drawn towards the partner but drawn towards the other person...
Re: Johnny football painter by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.229.148	6-Jan-05/9:18 PM
typos anyone?
Re: a comment on Math Poem 3 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/8:47 PM
In “Math Poem - Square Root of Minus Never” maybe they’ll replace it with “fractal.” I bet they can’t wait for the next installment.
Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	Shuushin 64.222.171.185	6-Jan-05/8:40 PM
LoL - Yoda is Jedi. A powerful Jedi is he, yes.
Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/8:37 PM
I used to hear kids say they’re not sure whether they believe and catch them figuring they might go to hell because they didn’t believe hard enough. “Help my unbelief” kinda thinking. Was Yoda Buddhist?
Re: a comment on Math Poem 3 by Dovina	Shuushin 64.222.171.185	6-Jan-05/8:29 PM
And I think you get a prize for the most frequent use of the word "facile" in any string of comments (not that it isn't an interesting word, just kindof rarely used).
Re: The Way by Dovina	Shuushin 64.222.171.185	6-Jan-05/8:22 PM
ouch - an anon one. Interesting thought. Is this a "do, or do not - there is no try" (Yoda) kinda thing? I like it - maybe we need an "aphorism" category.