Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/7:28 PM
It’s more like not finding it or even looking for it, but waking up to it.
Re: Ghostly Rememberance by Beyond_Dreams	Dan garcia-Black 67.122.13.57	6-Jan-05/7:28 PM
Yep. They can really shove your meat into the freezer when it suits 'em. -8-
Re: a comment on Affairs by Stacy Stewart	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/7:26 PM
"embers softly speaking" then. It was clear what you meant by downfall, just not clearly shown. Is an affair really a downfall? If so, how or why, or what emotions lead to that conclusion?
Re: The Saddest Part by MacFrantic	Dan garcia-Black 67.122.13.57	6-Jan-05/7:20 PM
I like this and that's the saddest part.
Re: a comment on Affairs by Stacy Stewart	Stacy Stewart 67.51.232.76	6-Jan-05/7:17 PM
"tis" has been edited since it was the wrong word to use i suppose. But embers sofly spoken is correct.....what are embers but burning pieces of wood...what noice do they make...crakling. Instead of saying crackling i used softly spoken. For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in. Did this clear things up a bit?
Re: The Way by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 67.122.13.57	6-Jan-05/7:12 PM
Is this kinda like, "I found it in the last place I would a thought to look for it?" I think it's kinda clever in very unbelievable way.
Re: Nightmares Of Yesterday by Zalev	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/5:12 PM
A worthy story, lacking interest because it's too directly told.
Re: Affairs by Stacy Stewart	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/4:40 PM
"embers softly spoken"??? "Tis love is . . . "???? The rest of this sentence is a lumbering flourish. The conclusion "Tis the downfall of man." is not supported or led up to.
Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	6-Jan-05/4:21 PM
kindof amazed that there are so many workable rhymes for "for" (I think you forgot "two-dollar whore")
Re: a comment on Math Poem 3 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Jan-05/4:02 PM
Dandy, yes, and for him that was enough. How similar is it that people hold to astrology, for example, or to luck or the intrinsic "good" of belonging to a social class?
Re: Gotta Leave You Alone by Katzclear	Mandrake 64.81.32.106	6-Jan-05/3:19 PM
Good lyric, you seem to be very proud of leaving your love, heh.
Re: a comment on War Story by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	6-Jan-05/1:46 PM
Dear horus8: I have always been write, never have I once been wrong. How dare you say such an awful thing!
Re: Ghostly Rememberance by Beyond_Dreams	horus8 24.130.62.63	6-Jan-05/1:37 PM
Jesus fucking christ. Why weren't you in Asia instead of the dingy supermodel we need more stories like This! 11!
Re: Affairs by Stacy Stewart	horus8 24.130.62.63	6-Jan-05/1:36 PM
Should start every line with 'tis' And just put this poem entirely out of it's misery instead of dicking around.
Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom	horus8 24.130.62.63	6-Jan-05/1:33 PM
Good God man, will you please learn how to fucking write?
Re: a comment on Betwixt and In Between by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	6-Jan-05/11:00 AM
Dear Zodiac: Yes, I am serious! And, of late, I have been whemying off into the moonlight quite often. In fact, I did so only the night before last an had a "major uberfaulty accident." I guess my timing was "a bit off." Kind of a "major midnight explosion" one might say. A real mess no doubt, but that is, no doubt, the risk one must take when whemying in the moonlight. And yes, it all did occur on a moon light hike that I had organized..... one that was at the time under my supervision....... not to say that it was all very embarrasing..... to say the least! Doug
Re: a comment on The Toilet Paper Tumbles by PsydewaysTears	PsydewaysTears 69.240.74.35	6-Jan-05/10:58 AM
Well somebody had to clean up the mess the meatball left behind. •°•Gregory James•°•
Re: a comment on Betwixt and In Between by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	6-Jan-05/10:52 AM
Dear Zodiac: Well..... considering that uberfaulty is a "protypical undergroup," that is, a group that has continued to be under-rated (as well as under-valued), the mean must then be protracted by adding to it a mathmatical value that is equal to approximately .287 times the square root of the atypical standard deviation of the group assuming that the group is, of course, in a state of rest. However, if any of the above assumptions are violated, then all bets would be off. So my best guess would be somwhere between 11.932% and 14.617%. Doug
Re: The Toilet Paper Tumbles by PsydewaysTears	Shuushin 64.222.175.19	6-Jan-05/9:47 AM
reminds me of meatball I once knew.
Re: Math Poem 3 by Dovina	Shuushin 64.222.175.19	6-Jan-05/9:43 AM
You generated alot of interest in this one, D - nice work.