Dovina
on Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams
20 Dec 2004, 12:02 PM
Reminds of TS Eliot "The Wasteland." Lots of mythology and language to dissect. I get maybe half of it, and that in fragments.
No, its not like that. I don't have this all formulated. Its just that metaphor (asignment) might work in a math setting, granted the numbers need more relationship to love, hate, etc, than I have shown. I don't think that makes the whole concept impossible or weird.
He probably deleted it so he could get it published.
No, you have offended my sensibilities by writing down some sums and then concluding that you can't write a maths poem. Thrown in the mix; love, hate, fear for no apparent reason, and then made some lewd comment about 'painting' with a greasy finger.
The logic seems to be 1 + 1 is not poetic, 1 + 1 is maths, maths is not poetic.
Are you interested in mathematics?
Have I offended your sensibilities in burbling about a sum? I think it goes back to a prior discussion regarding science in poetry. At least you say the idea of a math poem is okay this time. And what’s this about converse, unless you mean Dictionary Lesson? Wow, what a jumble of stuff to answer. Makes me lazy just trying. Maybe writing a math poem is like a painter writing one with only the tools he knows how to use.
Why did you delete your recent poem. I hope you did not change your mind because of something I said.
That is the second time in a few days I have heard the word palimpsest and the second time ever. Quite good, I would say you could always beef up the more prosaic lines. I Like 'lacking melody' for super-old people.
'What use is a thought that cannot be tasted?' come on surely you know the answer to that.
No, you can not just write down a sum, burble on about love, hate, fear and then make some guff conclusion. Your poem about converse blah blah had potential if it didn't lose its focus and conclude all manner of things. The idea of a maths poem is ok. But this is far too lazy. The last verse is cool.
There seems no obvious reason for such short couplets here. The poem would benefit from having more solid chunks. Also 'already tell their tale' and other parts seem far too portentious. That is to say you are making the moth's death more significant than it is.
Thanks. I got a little trigger-happy the last few days with this one. I appreciate your comment.