CommentsComments 26021–26040 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

darylchew replying on Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina 30 Aug 2004, 11:05 AM
may i ask, in what way is having sex connected to paying respects?
Bachus on He by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 11:02 AM
"But you never did came"? Good one, very Arkansass.
Dovina replying on Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina 30 Aug 2004, 11:00 AM
I think the suggestion of Dan garcia Black, "They paid their respects," is a better way of saying they had sex.
darylchew replying on Haunted by Bachus 30 Aug 2004, 10:57 AM
...i think its clearer now. marvellous work. winter and death really matches.
Dovina replying on The Room by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 10:56 AM
You're not advocating suicide again are you? I hope not, because if you are, there's a host of considerations besides "I want to die," and to not even mention them is to degrade the subject to mundane jibborish.
Bachus replying on Haunted by Bachus 30 Aug 2004, 10:53 AM
Is that code for RUN!!!...?
Bachus replying on Haunted by Bachus 30 Aug 2004, 10:52 AM
The house is a metaphor for a person... you know, getting older, overgrown? like a house would. You've never seen an old overgrown yard with a house somewhere in it?
darylchew on Haunted by Bachus 30 Aug 2004, 10:24 AM
sad. 'I try remembering you, but... Without chipped paint, or weeds.' explain this to me, will you?
darylchew on Come off with me Carly back into the city by zodiac 30 Aug 2004, 10:21 AM
i admit it, youre darn good.
darylchew on Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina 30 Aug 2004, 10:13 AM
...what is 'they did it' supposed to mean. vague.
darylchew replying on The Room by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 10:05 AM
maybe. i want to die.
Dovina on The Room by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 9:59 AM
Except for the line, "like my biography," this is much less subtle than "abortion." But I didn't get "abortion" at first. Maybe somewhere between is the balance.
Dovina on along the alley by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 9:54 AM
The only thing I'd change is punctuation in the first verse to match the others.
Dovina on Out goes the baby with the garbage by INTRANSIT 30 Aug 2004, 9:52 AM
What a shock that must have been! No wonder I don't remember it. What an unruly eviction!
Dovina on He by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 9:47 AM
Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.
darylchew on 32 Truths and 1 Lie by wilco 30 Aug 2004, 7:59 AM
really good.
darylchew replying on abortion by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 7:45 AM
haha yeah thats where i got my inspiration from.
BigB on along the alley by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 7:44 AM
haha my first poem only! gonna be as good as you soon!
darylchew on along the alley by BigB 30 Aug 2004, 7:02 AM
nice. about how one almost falls down to the depths of no return, but turning back just in time. inspirational. good use of light-imagery.
BigB on abortion by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 6:45 AM
*shivers* the silent scream?