leonxic
on He Will Be Loved by eyrbare
3 Aug 2004, 6:09 AM
I hate him already.
It sucks; I hate it. But if it's any consolation, the title was just as shitty as the poem.
Hah hah hah; real fucking funny. Seriously.
*vomit*
you know how to play with your words here...
i thought this was cool, who gave this a one, that's total bs, yeah some people hate rhymes, but this had some substance and connection to the every day person who feels trapped...i hoped i spelled rhyme right.
i liked this, i love the whole dot thing, the "dan" "fan" "plan" thing, the whole trying to describe going beyond self, that's always positive.
but you can kill a dead man, as long as he's talking...yes i have an aversion to the caps button and i'm a uh three dot whore, it's got some kind of name within the whole grammar thing, but its late and stuff so...
i know this sounds dumb, but i like how you said it, i just don't like the subject, i wish there was a subjective vote and an objective vote...
What do you think I'm trying to say? Honest question, not me being a smartass.
great poem, i like this more than ur others, seems to be of a better mood, -9-
Lovely! Great visual poem! Way to paint a picture with words! =-)
Nice rhythm. If I may ask, is there a reason "lie" is not capitalized? Typo? Just curious.
=-)
gluttony and greed
tried em' both
didnt sound right
you sir, are the devil.
what about gluttony?
swift and brutal -- like the horsemen - 8 -
truly, you are the devil.
what about gluttony?
brutal and swift -- like the Horsemen. like it
Could be said more effectively in half the words.
I was expecting some dribble here about love and falling and you know that annoying crap, but wow, not even...
Very sweet, nice for family, but it's slightly cheesy and obvious, but poems are for lots of things and I think it does well what it's suppose to be doing, but as a poem, well...