SupremeDreamer
on Hollywierd by INTRANSIT
7 Jun 2004, 1:44 PM
This reminds me of my odd rantings. It began pretty well, but the end wasn't very satisfactory for me. Felt and looked like you just tapered off after "Mr. President"
You've been blessed with eight.
It had some good parts mostly, but theres a lot of wrinkles that weaken its effect.
You've been blessed with seven.
yak. i have read better from you.no vote sorry!
Good Gess! but its not him next!
oh zodiac you're great
no horus you are great
no but zodias you are wonderful can i kiss your clinky bot PLEASE!
no horus you re king of the poemranker
well yeh i'm good but gosh so are you
shall we be, like, homesexual with one another?yeh and keep all these young pups off the site while we are AT IT
hey zode..what all this about ducks and geese hen? oh you cunt...kilkenny/any...beautiful!!!
twotter
wibble
hey horus8...you're quite good actually
hah got you you're rubbish mate
horus8..got no life
got no mates
apart from that zodiac dude
and he doesn't count
horus8
doesn't like angry chickens and uses words like solipsistic in his poems in the vain hope it makes him appear big and clever
it doesn't
solipsistic is one of THOSE words
like asphalt
i bet he's used that in one of his poems too
i bet he's never used angry chickens
i bet he's never been published
i bet he's old,ugly and frustated
he doesn't like me
he doesn't like angry chickens
he doesn't intimidate me
i'm back boys
have fun
oh and one more thing
parallels
twotter
this is the best poem ever posted by anyone anywhere ever
zodiac....mate of horus8
horus8
king of the poemranker notice board/sad sack of shite
delete where appropriate
pain killer
replying on Jimmy and Chichi Choo (Sub-Dylan Bullshit Blues) by the codeine kid
7 Jun 2004, 11:35 AM
ah Jimmy zodiac wibble wibble honk honk...you've read and voted on "thousands" of poems and are actually proud of the fact....give that man a chocolate mouse...ohhh but i bet you can't wait to show off your poemranker "I've voted for over a thousand poems me!" badge at your annual unpublished writers meetings down the poemrankers arms (real ale only) Gone by the weekend...nah you don't get rid of me that easily although i admit i won't be spending quite as much time here as your good self...it's life Jim, but not as YOU know it wibble wibble honk! I've been a user for over six months now wibble wibble snork...oh shut up you sad sck of shite
I see my comment was too short. I meant I didn't want him to cancel himself out by what someone else said about his lyrics. You have it handled, carry on.
KE?
now, that's not nice.
I've read several of yours and you are pretty good at writing lyrics. The biggest problem I've seen with some of them is the structure. That's pretty easily fixed though, when you put the words to music. It's all about editing when you get to that stage. You can tell the ones of mine that I wrote with a guitar and the ones I wrote...just writing. The ones I wrote w/o using a guitar don't flow nearly as well.
As far as the lyrics go though, not too shabby.
Sloppy what? Nothing I saw....10,10.
Don't do that to yourself.
I'm looking forward to reading obituary to the moon. That makes it hrd to speak on this piece. I see that you are a musician. read a few af mine and let me know if I have any hope as a lyricist?
A copy of poetry for dummies. what's the Norton Anthology? i might need it.
I am well aware that Horus8 is quite surgical about his choices.
bittersweet; the language is simple but warming