SupremeDreamer
on A Dangling Poo by zodiac
31 Mar 2004, 8:37 PM
I can imagine cheerleaders singing this at ShitFest, Anus Parade, or the Fecal Olympics. This is lovely, spectacular, and amazing compared to the cheers spouted at a brain-numbing highschool football game.
Grade A Turd Material, Shit-Crumpet approved, worthy of a ten. Be proud, and stand with the honor befitting a Shit-Head.
Dust off the geetar, grab yer jamming buddy M.G. and you just might have a HIT - call your agent!
I gotta say though, nobody does the [browne] like -=DA=-
Shuushin
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 8:31 PM
"Ass Poetica" - nice!
In my continuing search to "get" -=DA=- I have read each and every one of his posts, including the one's he's deleted and prolly 90% of the comments.
BTW, PLEASE Mr. -=A=-, if you read this - please will you repost "Love Letter to Crystal Lane Swift"????
that was truly a masterverk - I shit you not.
(no title in body please).
Actually a little twist there in the second to last line. Sounds (the situation) so wonderful but then there is this little shadow of doubt (the quarreling).
Would be nice to exploit this more. Something like "He's so thoughtful and kind and everything is so wonderful except for the way he stares at my sister's ass when he thinks I don't see" kindof thing.
nicely and subtly rhymed.
EXCEPT HOBBY/LOBBY - god, fix that please.
SupremeDreamer
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 8:16 PM
Now thats a bit silly to ask, he's been here for a few years.. two I think- a wicked long time in any case, one the first bunch of bastards to become a member perhaps.
prolly a good performance piece; it makes interesting sounds.
Try a version of this that isn't in the first person, see if you still buy it.
(I'm not saying you won't, but it might help refine the thought).
yeah sorry about that format
SupremeDreamer
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 8:09 PM
Its not a question of arousal you toilet-impared freak! Its a question of duty- your despicable acts of terror and ability to stir conflict make you an essential part of this cursed Ranker Existence.
Must I deprive you of your wheel-chair as some sick form of motivation? Perhaps embalm you rotting flesh with feces? Resort to chemical stimulation?
Do you suggest I actually endure this ranker life of mine without you to make it interesting and give me plenty of good opportunities to upset the peace of the ranker with acts of retardation? How depraved can you be you crippled shit-crumpet!?
Feels a tad too "thesorisized".
I think it might need more to bring it back to the human condition (cuz, well - its not really about bulls, is it?)
woah. thats deep.
I'm sorry but I have trouble with the format. Enought that I have trouble getting through it.
I think it might have something to do with the sushi I just had.
I think it represents a good snapshot of a frame of mind in the moment just before one "grows up" (whatever that is) - this exact feeling.
You may be surprised, and perhaps relieved, to know that there is still a bit to go and you won't spend your entire life wishing for misspent youth.
As a slight aside, there is a recent study where folks aged 65 and older were asked what their favorite age was - 40-41 was the most cited result.
SupremeDreamer
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 7:54 PM
Well, its true that alot of posts have used ass humor and the shit that comes out of the almighty ass, so I understand what you mean. (DA perfected the art of writing about shit, course you've probably read those, if not I recommend reading them; he pioneered the art of writing about shit, or thats what I'm lead to believe.)
But I just had to make a contribution of somesort to "Ass Poetics".. I felt it was the next step after my Golden Shower piece lol.
SupremeDreamer
replying on A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 7:33 PM
Structurally? Well I can't see where you'd get that either, might have been a figment of your imagination lol. But revision will hopefully fix the problems I have with the piece.. honestly I wasn't that satisfied with it when I posted it.