some deleted user
on Another Fucking Slow, Sad Song by wilco
30 Mar 2004, 11:07 AM
"It's all I have"
This inconsistant meter would be hard to sing.
Such sadness.
HEY guys, THANKS. Been in training most of the day and I popped out to check messages - horry cow.
Thanks for the good words - much appreciated!!
Amendment: I'm cool now with the cha/char/tea part and actually like using different words. But I'm still stuck on beared. Is it a play on bared? On beard? Would you consider leaving it bear, as in 'tea and ornaments that bear its leaf'?
very IMPRESSIONable
I don't get it either, but it sure does ring nice. It it ok to like it just for it's ring? If so 9.
Sentimentally moving. But why Monet?
Impressive.
A Casio-keyboard beat accompaniment (with one-finger-chord effect) for a drain-smelling man-spaetzle.
very moving
A fully ripened cadaver's glans.
A veritable lifetime of boil in the bag faeces.
In all honesty, this poem went beyond me leaky dome.. either its too abstract for me or it causes me to have a brain-fart, or I'm not applying my I.Q., therefor I shall refrain from voting.. perhaps you could explain it to me, most of your works I consider to be enjoyable mind benders, but every now and then I'm left feeling BENT.
SupremeDreamer
replying on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
30 Mar 2004, 6:52 AM
old hat, yes, and its intentional.. I had an urge to include diseased seed and such because I never really included that before in any of my earlier writings.. and oddly enough I've been spinning that idea for awhile in my drafty jester dome.
I like that refrain too.. specially since I've been mumbling that to myself for three days, suddenly and for no reason.. ever had that happen to you? Then again I'm a freak with an odd genetic make-up.
Oh, just wondering.. you think I took the proper speech a bit far? (I figured its good in an ode.. or maybe that belief of mine is based on inane & erroneous presumptions.. ah well, do tell me your thoughts of this.)
I'm sorry, I don't get using beared instead of bore, or why it's called char in the poem and cha in the title (seems char is better for both). I'm sure you had a reason; I just can't see it. The rest is better than ever.
Very well put together.
I rather like the refrain 'Where o where is my delusion of power/ that eludes me in this comic and dire hour'
Bits about disease spreading seed are a bit old hat.
Thanks, but I was just kidding. The real truth is I just think Christian porn addicts are the most hilarious people ever. I strongly encourage you to see for yourself here: http://www.porn-free.org/masturbation.ht
First verse is very good, the rest falls apart a bit due to its reliance on abstractions, it also gets a bit self-absorbed.
hey, dont get me wrong... bottom line is ... i DO not browse porn, not interested in any as well. what i'm into is romance in its true and basest essence. moreso would i write anything that would pertain to it for i do not want to "as you say" add depravity in our world :P . thanks for your insight. and you are doing a great thing.
ei thanks... i wont edit though, coz if i do the rankings would reset...: )