Congratulations on the Top 20 coup. Jeremi still looks like A.C. Slater, though. -10-

Whats this supposed to be? A parody? Its funny, a good joke, but its lacking.. since your description of zodiacs personality is purely fictional.. and has little relation to zodiac. But its an amusing piece never-the-less, thats worth an eight.

Thanx Shuushin. Step x step the story goes: 1.Evil Kingdom of Aesgntor (Aze-in-tor) has been hidden for years. 2. Young boy steals the firesword and escapes. 3. The guardian demons give chase. Intermission :) 4. The sword hampers boy's escape. 5. The demons catch hero. 6. Boy kills all but one in pursuit. 7. Last demon survives; kills boy but recieves fatal wounds from sword. 8. Demon heads back toward Aesgntor. 9. He dies and falls into the murky ocean. 10. The sword falls as well and becomes extinguished... 11. ...or does it? Thanx for criticism on grammar! Not bad for a sophomore, huh?

The trick of the dandelion clock: To disperse in the wind, grey seeds to interchange like girls, plain as a sugar's beet, that dance, a#### #p### ##p## ###l## ####e# #####s each hiding a Newton.

Zodiac, I actually did make a change. I mistakenly placed an "a" both before and after the word "place" in the third line of the poem. It was an obvious error that I felt compelled to fix. Wow you are really paranoid about this whole little game we've been playing here. Chill-out man. You really lack self control don't you? You're delusional to boot. On three occasions here you stated that you would no longer engage me. Twice you could not resist the intentional bate I threw your way and now you've conjured up some strange conspiracy theory around a simple grammatical correction I made to this poem. Wow! I didn’t realize I had rocked your world so profoundly! But your comment was revealing. From your own pen you assert, "If I rank it high, that I'm weak-willed and awestricken by your skill"....then you proceed to give me a 10!! Gee Professor I never new you felt that way. Coming from a literary genius like you, that's quite a compliment. I'm really quite happy that you've responded as you have. Your impulsiveness and lack of control are what this poem is all about. You can knock my writing abilities all you want but you can't deny that I've captured a salient aspect of your personality. None of us is perfect. That's why I thought your Joe-Joe work was so good. Yes, it does describe an unflattering aspect of my personality. Darky says I'm "thick"...very perceptive of him... I often can be although I refer to it as being "head strong". My colleagues here at the college…who are profoundly liberal…freely attest to my unyielding personality and, at times, myopic way of looking at things. Not a big deal, we’re all works in process. By the way, where did the "Father Figure" crap come from? I know I said that your ideas are similar to those of an 18 year old kid..but I really have no idea how old you are....for all I know you might be old enough to be my grandfather. At any rate, please relax a bit and don’t take things so seriously…life is too short. Peace Joe-Joe

sold.

Flows fairly well - thinking "Sancturies" should not be plural, but possessive. Got pulled right through the first third, (was thinking, "this is a ten, this is a ten") then I had trouble following the story ("...9....8...") - might be more complex than it needs to be? How does one pronounce "Aesgntor?"