Bachus
on Alone With Memories by Mona Lisa
16 Nov 2003, 1:41 AM
Perfect. 10! Bachian swagger award.
You are unique, and I need not tell you why. you are a wonderful mother, and an exceptional lover.
Cliche, but honest.
Bring your in and your to together. Other than that, increase your verb power and symbolism. For instance? Who is he. Where is the park? who's us?
Classy. I wish my mom was normal like that a lot.
Because liking the devil + liking yourself = sex with horses. *)
like it! good feeling.put into the words
Sometimes, it's hard to tell your dad "no" when he pisses on the carpet, and the furniture.
Cute.
I did write another poem...you had asked..
Why do you call yourself the fallen angel who now hates God and all whom he created in his image?
I have writen again, but its not nutty.
:o)
Do not worry. I think poesyests are too stuffed with emotions to comment appropriately.
Man, your horrible.
The last line doesn't go.
What is it with you and masticated?
You're right, I'm sorry dude, that fucking bastard has got me pissed off is all. I appologies. You know I love ya.
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on The Poemranker Poe-lease by Jeremi B. Handrinos
15 Nov 2003, 6:13 PM
It's a comedy idiot. That's what comedy does. It poks fun at me too, and the entire incident. Don't be such a prick, prick. You're certainly not above getting 900 zeros yourself, are you?
Interesting and creative. Atthe same time totally DRUNK