Still not back but I had a strong urge to write something to be thought about.

MEDIOCRITY CODE: B16040F1

heh - cute. I was just about to give up, cuz the endrhymes are, well - like they are. Then you have this awesome ending; good job.

[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [X] About romantic love [_] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [_] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [_] Autobiographical but written in the third person [_] Clerical errors [X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [X] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [_] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [_] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [_] Self-obsessed [X] Sentimental [X] Smugly-named protagonist [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [X] Vicarious wish fulfilment -12-

Tears...perfect 10!

This poem is EXCELLENT. I cried when I read it. Everything just flows together. I give it a 10!

I feel that there is something missing too. It does need to describe the 'beautiful scars'. But other than that it was very good.

I love pumpkin bowling umm why is there a penis?

line breaks--why? no werkie, comme ca.

i think that coming right out with cognizance of your disorder ruins the surprise, lee. it's quite entertaining, the 'or so they say' refrain. but the opening needs work. imo.