capachijim
on Skull fucking Miggy, a list, by Iggy Poppy by Bachus
26 Sep 2003, 3:31 PM
-10-
PHOTOSHOP, JOE!!!!!!
its a decent rendition of teh first one. -9-
Proof that too much time on the internet distorts ones sense of reality. I'm really happy the ending did occur in the midst of a sexual climax... yours or your 2 dimensional friend...screen cleaner was just not meant to handle such a job. Go to a bar or club tonight. I'm sure you'll do better.....at least I hope so.
Let me guess...you're a network specialist currently laying fiber in the New York City Subway system?
the last line I think is wasted, as it has been explained in the rest of the poem.
the breasts into an undersized bra, unwilling?
anthropomorphism?
well, I alt+f4 it, but not before saying it's very cute.
pretty good. nice and simple.
no prob. the best way to have friends... is to be one. i'm kosher. sometimes dill. mostly kosher.
I would give it a companion piece in another stanza the same size.
Like:
At the bottom
of the post, hops
A blind crow
Your time will arrive my friend. Sorry, about the Settle thing, he made me swear on the back of a square.
cumbersome/heavy-redundant, in fact, lose the not started stanza altogether. and I don't like (poor sod) either. i get the geeling you're trying to end this on a positive note. poor sod doesn't fit. put it back on the lift, and adjust accordingly. whv.
meh. thanks. with all the messes I have to fix, this will probably die.
I see you've been to Pakistan?
This poem would be a perfect companion piece to the sound of a turd trying to pull itself back together the day after a relentlessly pounding rain storm.
In New South Whales we head shoot our palfrey and grow are own thyme shrubbers. 5 fur the tittle
nice one.
I loved how you confused star trek for starwars, and then later, them both, for Chud-Tron. lol
A couple of errors "No, more that a machine," than,
and there was another in there too. So here's a 9.
In the end it begins to show promise.