I like it a lot, but I'm slightly confused by the title vs. the context. It seems more like you're talking to a familiar acquaintance of some sort, rather than a stranger on the street. Or maybe you're calling that acquaintance a loser of life? Hmm, that could be what I originally missed.

Hey you bastards i like this. just cos you're all single and don't know what it is to have a kid. shut the fuck up, i like this.

This is worthy of the gods.

Why is this in the worst poem section, this is genius work, i like it you mean people, go out and get hearts.

nice poem, true genis work, you should be proud.

Sounds angry yet emotional, am i stupid? good poem.

~incarnate~ this is odd poem, good tho. (What is haiku?)

That a decent poem, i don't know why i like it so much, being in a relationship makes it much more emotional. good work MaliqaTara

Bahookie, your poem is no way nearly as odd as your name. i like this poem yet i can't understand why.

Um...it doesn't make much sense to me personally, but then i am stupid, it sounds pretty cool anyhow.

this could be half, and more effectively so.

do you want a comma in s4, after beneath? nice job, here.

cool.

this is only an intro. and richa is right--it is devoid of any specifics, any individuality.

all right pig. first, it's a good idea. i agree that you don't need baptized--that was john's gig anyway. no apos. in pilums, please, and the spelling you were looking for is "chalice" not: chal·lis - n. A soft, lightweight, usually printed fabric made of wool, cotton, or rayon. i think you also meant 'covering' not coveting. christ was never a coveter. i don't think that the 'consumed by judas' line is working. the way you have the hammer blows is awkward. hammers strike blows, but only the wind and your favorite girlfriend actually 'blow'. also, there were be no dew, at noon, the traditional hour of crucifixion. carpentr dying on wood--very nice. uttering his final words to the four winds--very pagan notion. did you mean it to be so? heaven and earth would be more of a christian reference. judas belches from consumption? TB? resurrection is generally associated with dawn, not sunset, and i think you will need to work this line a little harder to convince me that you meant the irony. whew. all in all, lots of good ideas that don't dive into cliche. just needs a tune up. no vote until then, pig.

this has a nice start, but ye gods! all the extra words! can glean away some of the little words, to make it cut with a sharper edge? and, the ending feels like a bit of a cop-out after that details you gave at first. this has a lot of potential, especially since you have grasped the idea that specific details make a poem real.