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replying on Pray For Cum By JesusFreak (parody of CLS's pray for help) by DreamerSupreme
4 Sep 2003, 8:19 AM
I would not be surprised if it was but parodies are so derrivative. Why would you write mocking something you thought not worthy of artistic consideration.
It is like tabloid journalists spending their lives trailling some guy and then calling him a waste of space.
Its ok up to half way, then it loses its meter at 'old and grey' and nothing really happens
the last line is a bit infantile, and destroys the flow.
Other than that it has a rather good lyrical flow, a bit like a rap song. And a rap song about the one and only me is hardly original.
But overall quite enjoyable
an adept use of religious language.
'yeast baptized in wine' is a good idea, I think it says people feasting with bread and wine. There is no need for baptized though, the (red) wine of communion is sufficient to make the christ reference. Some of the bigger words seem to impede the flow, so it is best to have no redundancy.
I like 'a carpenter dying on wood' an interesting irony to point out
Dear SupremeDreamer,
You are su-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-ch a cu-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-nt.
Good day sir!
An alternative title would be very much appreciated.
Joe-Joe one should never abstain from endeavor, in the words of Kate Bush and Peter Gabriel - 'Don't Give Up'.
Whether Jesus was a mortal or infinite is something I have pondered on for all my life and its open for question. The line in the poem 'as he falls from faith' endorses that uncertainty i have (and indeed Jesus may have had). Judas's suicide is poetic in that according to catholic faith God will not accept mortals who take their own lives but did he have a hand in his fate? did he cheat? The carpenter dying on wood is an irony that the creator is killed by his creation in both man and cross. Its all about irony and tainted faith.
Thank you for your comments my young fry.
No, you must respect all faiths. If people believe in Muslim in there hearts then it is true for them. Are you just blinded by you're own arrogance?
That's not an opinion.
"Mob mentality" I suffer a extreme liking to the use of sarcasm. exaggeration, frustration, etc.. text offers many faces, im just a mask in constant remolding.
Plus, you got the point finally. no need to crack open yer skull and extract the holy secrets. ;P
drunk, two nights ago. i spray painted some expensive cars. last fuck was 3 weeks ago.. swimming, well, i tried to drown myself in a bucket yesterday.
No worries though, my "mob solution" has been tossed for a more stubborn, persistent approach, that slowly, but surely, slammed my point through.
I dont mind that he wants to make me think.. i just mind when folks become so brave and then do not wish to go the distance, resigning themselves to calm defense, i get all.. qwerky..
in other words, if its labeled "Coke" and i suddenly get "pepsi" the checkout clerk will suffer. oh well. its in the past now.
DreamerSupreme
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
4 Sep 2003, 12:22 AM
METH IS BETTER. BITCH. FUCK COKE. SNORT SODA. DRINK A WARM MILKY COLODA, START UP THE TOYOTA, AND ILL SEE YA LATA LOSA.
FUCK COLUMBIAN DRUG PRODUCE!! METH IS AMERICAN MADE, SUBURBAN CHEMISTRY LAB APPROVED.
SupremeDreamer
replying on Pray For Cum By JesusFreak (parody of CLS's pray for help) by DreamerSupreme
3 Sep 2003, 11:55 PM
-Bows- well, i never claimed to be nice, nor without perversion. I dont think that even darkie can find a reference to me saying that, and he has a well kept journal of what i do/say.
rot in hell? let me guess, your christian.. ? well, fuck you, your theistical god, your worthless heaven, and your gay pitchfork devil hell.
and get a sense of humor you lil shit.
...coming west on Highway 11 take a left on the "dirt road" at the bottom of "the hill", and watch closely for the iron gates at the end of a solitary road to the right...
Shit! I just deleted your last message by mistake. It's too bad cause I split my gut at the coincidences. Were you going to include anything about the "wildman" that lurks on the back road too? I couldn't really fit it into the script or emotion.
I can't wait to read your "version". Not looking forward to being beaten at my own poem , though. Please post what you have for me. I'd love to see those freaky similarities!
A. Nomaly
on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 9:53 PM
of bathtub familiar, how does it go?
millions of pages turned noting
noting
noting
i will stop for a second/hold yer breath
thanks Bacchus, sorry it was so late
A. Nomaly
on Start from the bottom, a.k.a have no car have no money by A. Nomaly
3 Sep 2003, 9:35 PM
if you followed the instructions it wouldnt seem so random
thanks