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on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian
3 Sep 2003, 3:18 AM
I, myself? Love to stumble, and do as much as possible.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
replying on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 3:15 AM
No, when i was younger I was in a typhoon on kauai with my mom and I remember seeing weird shit flying by the windows, weird shit happend when i'm with my mom. that goes beyond description. i've written a lot about this in my poems horus8's "Activating your infinity" and "black sanded tropical vision". And quite a few others.
SupremeDreamer
on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 3:08 AM
hrmm.. ok, i get it now, but a question: is the confusing jibber here and there the mental breakdown of the mans mind as he goes through the process of death?
ex: We are yes we are are we yes
blessed with 8.
SupremeDreamer
replying on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 3:02 AM
Ah, alrighty.
Shardik
replying on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 2:37 AM
My mom's a nurse that helps people die. She's columbian German and i have an Oedipus complex. We she each other very rarely.
SupremeDreamer
replying on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 2:33 AM
the poem. i dont get it. thats all.
then again, you and i both know about my drafty cranium, so i guess im not saying anything really.
Shardik
replying on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 2:28 AM
About what?
SupremeDreamer
on There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 2:20 AM
Um.. well, im left thinking "durr.. huh?"
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Paranoia & the thinnest curtain by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Sep 2003, 2:08 AM
Seriously though?
Normally, homosexual poetry doesn't do me right, but I read this poem while listening to Ginsberg sing C'mon jack, and let me tell you? I laughed more than once. here's an eight.
"I knew we both wished this photograph lasts to eternity"
huh? maybe this would work better:
I knew we wished this photograph to last an eternity.
hrmm? dont you think this makes more sense?
overall, i like this, but its a rough draft in my opinion, it needs to be ironed out.
Blessed with 8.
SupremeDreamer
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
3 Sep 2003, 12:29 AM
let me guess, you figure that childbirth is a holy subject, and no matter how badly a poet writes about childbirth it is a sin to make fun of poems with such a topic? yes, ofcourse, and you also believe any poet who does make fun of those bad poems are evil men that must not have high ratings since that wouldnt be right.
you are a spineless turd, that must be brutally beaten with a nine iron, then displayed publicly on an upside down cross, with your back facing the crowd, your ass stuffed with a snake.
Doesn't sound like something Jesus would do. Must have been a bad day. Even the greatest philanthropists have their moments of self-doubt.
SupremeDreamer
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
3 Sep 2003, 12:21 AM
because she must defend anything that has the corny emotional goo that society loves. she will suck your dick if you say you'll let up on crushing this bad dilutation of art, so go ahead and enjoy yourself, and make sure to be cruel in doubling the pressure of your blows afterwards.
SupremeDreamer
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
3 Sep 2003, 12:18 AM
you have no concept of how a parody should be made. a parody should exaggerate the weakness of the poem it makes fun of, and must include humor that borders and even crosses the line that seperates good and nasty. your not fit to judge this sort of writing, since you have no understanding of this particular sort of satire.
(i really like my "uppity official mask", you like it? im still ironing out the wrinkles)
SupremeDreamer
on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
3 Sep 2003, 12:14 AM
good parody, made it as nonsensical as crystals poem, but unlike hers, it had class and humor, making it worth a million daddy -pregnancy- poems loaded with Van goo labeled with the trademark company name "Emo Slushy" advertised daily with the nice catch phrase "Mush is good when you have no teeth!" made fun of by oversexed teenagers snickering "toothless mouths are better suited to suck drooling snakes"
not many true barbarians like you exist my friend, but quantity is not needed with all the vicious brutality you posses.
Blessed with 10.
electroman1979
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
2 Sep 2003, 10:31 PM
i did rate it, i guess a zero is better than nothing....wait... it is nothing, and i did read the first one before i read yours
Bachus
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
2 Sep 2003, 10:27 PM
Then... Why'd you rate it sweate checks? Hmmm? You dream of squatting down in front of me for a bag of tea. Admit it.
great job, what station do we tune to to hear more ?
Bachus
replying on Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus
2 Sep 2003, 10:19 PM
It's a parody. Maybe you should read the original first Spunktastic woman 196helmetshine. Oh, by the way, you are an idiot, a very special idiot.