Caducus
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
5 Aug 2003, 6:47 AM
Some wicked phrases and imagery but the long lines make it tiring to read and absorb. 7
oh scitz! suh a guilty pleasure, the pimple poem! and you are a master of it! what a conun-fucking-drum! 10. for polishing the craft.
A disgustingly beautifully repugnant poem on a equally disgusting man who created a church institution that fucked religion in the same way.
Exquisite 9
you could do with a few apostrophes, poetess
okay, i agree he does come off as a pompous ass. he acts superior, but, er...well, his writing IS superior to "99% of others on here."
if only the boy knew humility. but then, we all need a fulcrum or two.
Mr Pig
replying on On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit
5 Aug 2003, 5:43 AM
My gripe with PAKI is the nature in which he criticizes. I am not offended by his dislike of my work because he is a minority in not liking it. Every comment he has made has been rather rude and when he gets a bad comment the jury is out, I think that is a tad unfair. Besides he has had one good comment from me, the boy thinks he is poetically blessed more than 99% of others on here.
I hope that answers your question.
The ending goes off on a insiduous tangent but because of that it works well and contrasts the 2 moods well. I just hope this is fiction. Why also did he lose his mind I wonder.
Neatly done
dude, goodness gracious!! I've looked at this sooo many times, never posted a reply and finally realized that you are talking out of your ass. Poetry is always beatuiful when one puts their trials or joys or beliefs into it. Poetry is about self expression and you just the same as Dr. Prichter, have deviled the art.
wow.
touching.
Maybe, but how many 4th grade poems do you see here? I'm really getting into childrens poetry for some odd reason.
cmon.. this is like, what, a fourth grade poem? 4.
actually it is possible to smoke what has already been smoked.. pot heads know this, since when they are out of money they delight in extracting resin from their pipes to smoke and get high from. It actually works.
heh, just some interesting, or completetly stupid information.
What a perfectly lovely poetical notion. Yes, valentimes how charming like children in pre-school. You're a wonder fairy-cakes. I think I 'm starting to adore you.
Nifty, but I think eating grapes would work better than fruit.
it's just one muscle that aches.
You're an obvious "Lap snorkel".
yours that is (i,ann boleyn) not mine!
Ha ha! You didn't even read the poem you twat... Ha, ha ha ha...