-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Vodka, An ex-girlfriend, and a mess by Luzr
20 Jul 2003, 6:04 PM
Don't get hangovers? Obviously you've never woken up with your face in a tramp's crapping arse.
Wow. Just when I think you can't shock me anymore *BLAM*. Nice.
Hangover? I'm just lucky I don't get them, Cause from what I saw this morning, they are worse than being a man at a PMS convention.
hey hey, nothin like a hangover to snap you out of writers block. 8
Im not jesus. ;P
Hmm.. Meta-poetry. I thought that was a trend started late 18th century that died out til about the early 20th century and something entirely different, but As you will my Grace, But lets take it a step even further.
I thought about writing poems about writing poems about writing poetry,
But then again that seemed a bit foolish to me
For shortly there after a messenger of GOD came and pronounced it shit
So I said fuck it and Quit
I would suggest correcting the typo for better votes.
And there "naver" will be. Sounds like a lovely trip to the barber.
Not sure about his user name but using my top secret hacking software I have discovered that his email address is moose@mountie.canada.com
sudden infant death is harsh. I understand .
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on I've lost my poetic edge by thepinkbunnyofdoom
20 Jul 2003, 12:38 PM
One of the first symptoms of writer's block (among dunces, at least) is that you start writing poetry about writing poetry, or "meta-poetry" if you will. At the very least you write shitty poemes about the room you are sitting in, or what you can see out your window (this actually inspired my timeless classic AIDS in a van), or how it's not your fault you've got writer's block because you're off your mash on ecstasy pipes. Here are some classic examples:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
The only worthwhile thing in this poem is the word "stright" which means; to write with ones teeth while in a straight jacket. The rest is pg.
What's your user name? Because from your comment here it sounds like you're a fucking fraud. You don't have to rank any of my pieces, because I don't lose any sleep either way and I think your writing is shit, shat, and shite, cheers! look up diluted in the dictionary you fucking idiot, too, by the way. it means to weaken, thin out, please don't come over here and second guess my work. I know what I'm doing and why I select certain words. Adam, isn't smart enough to be deluding. Thank you, and carry on fuckling.
I have no creative thoughts at the moment so I shall write a poem about it!
unless this is a creative thought
anyway a bit too smart/postmodern/ for me
a thought too late and too soon ?
I think you are trying too hard to rhyme. You need to be more graphic and more specific in terms you use. We know what humans do to other animals but point out hypocrisies, use metaphor etc
just seems like a list of fucked up things to do
maybe needs tightening to give the words their full power.
Is he really a "diluted twit", or was that deluded? Also, I think "sounded like a ten year old child" would be better in the present tense. I can't really rank it as is but, perhaps after a good edit.
Cheers!
nice username
I apologise, I'm sorry, I'm really really drunk and I have 8 people at my house naked(Only two of them female sadly enough). I have no clue what that has to do with anything other than me being naked drunk and sorry. Can you forgive me?