Jeremi B. Handrinos
on Extra Strength Tylenol by DurtKL
7 Jul 2003, 10:57 PM
I just read the comments to this poem, and did I ever laugh, good Christ, we are a sad bunch.lol.
profound?.. hrmm.. when i think about it, i think this:
how strong is knowledge without understanding knowledge?
That's what I'm saying sweet cheecks.
Supreme Knowledge lived and Sincere understanding died. When I realized that was their names, I thought, jesus, that's fucking profound, I mean really , think about that.
lol. what are you trying to say exactly?
this poem kicks ass. i really loved the html introduction. blessed with a 10.
the rewrite is alot better than the original. heres an 8. btw, you really need to have a better attitude concerning commentry, because changing titles to erase a low vote is a pathetic response. Plus, giving me a low rating when i respond to it by sticking a zero on your work is childish... doesnt make you look intelligent. dont take this comment to be pompous in nature, but i do admit sadly that it does seem that way. Im just trying to give you some advice not to step on you, but to help you.
SupremeDreamer
on 910 Via Padova, Claremont, Ca. (Mike Piazza Edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Jul 2003, 8:09 PM
hrmmm. cool adaptation yoda. ;P 9.
Not bad, good work. It could use a better introduction though.. and a better title. heres a 7
dood.. you need to realize that you dont have a fucking inkling of understanding concerning the subject.. plus your limping poetically with how your attempting to poetically write about it.
Yeah.. i dont intent to be mean or insulting.. but bachus is right... your recent pieces are.. crappy. The ideas are good, just the way you presented them suck.
the title and the poem have nothing to do with each other. you failed miserably to make a poem about the godself within. blessed with 3
"It is only my refection" reflection
"but their simply appears to be," their should be There
Nice poem, though its a little confusing, you need to be more descriptive. You have alot to work on, but you have potential. Blessed with 6
I really like this poem alot. It is written well, but theres lots of room for improvement. blessed with 8.
Too bad you didn't write it, cuz it's good.I was going to compliment you on improving.
This is actually funny, now that I think about it.
OK let me inform everyone: I DID NOT WRITE THIS CRAP.
TWO: Im going to ask that this username be DELETED.
Im not going to have some imposter attempting to make me look like an idiot.
Also, settle, i think your the one responsible for this, and its not smart to piss me off. If im wrong about my assumptions, forgive me.
btw, heres a zero.
Haiku.. ah, i never really had much practice, actually no practice is more like it, with haikus.. but yeah, abandon the haiku idea or remake this.. could be a damn good start for a better poem though. i wont vote on this for the moment.
Hrmm.. i remninds me of the table of contents of a magazine.. hrmm.. can i be allowed to ponder a title for this one too? good work btw. blessed with 10