JoyLuck
on Ocular Photoalbum by DreamerSupreme
7 Jul 2003, 6:35 PM
nice poem
it treads nicely
even though it's not a haiku
interesting
fuck the po po
i just wanna smoke my ganja in peace.
"What do you get when you cross an owl with a bungee chord? My ass. Nyah, haha, haha, haha, ENOUGH!! "
"What do you get when you cross an owl with a bungee chord? My ass. Nyah, haha, haha, haha, ENOUGH!! "
Yes, I feel the same way, but she's starting to stink up the room.
SupremeDreamer
replying on 12673 Jalepeno ave. Chino, Ca. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Jul 2003, 4:31 PM
Dont see why, but your welcome. ;)
yeah, i know, i have a problem with being cheap when it comes to rhymes. ;P
Yeah, so you now see i can play the emotion guitar. ;P
Heh. dont poke on those particular emotions of mine. ;P
I do believe Judy left the room, perhaps she needs you to drive her home?
your mom just feels to good to let go
You are trying to hard, you need to let go, because this poetry of yours today is just shit mate, turn around and do it again, I'm serious. It's not poetry, it sounds like the diluted message of a dyslexic cult leader huffing on low grade gasoline.
a comment nice and succinct is the essence of poetry for me. This is not a haiku but never mind
I like your half rhyme, things and screams. And I like the final two lines too
That's not the universe ticking gumshoe that's the sound of poets everywhere eating their time pieces, so as to forget when they read this.
aha, yes, funny, but again, not yours
PLAGERISED!
WANKER!
Happens all the time. I've already lost three that way this week.
"I found the sin of oceanic waters as I would drown" Christ, things are grim when even the Oceanic waters are sinning? you sure that's heaven and not just a blue and gold macaw eating a papaya?