Bachus
replying on OM by SupremeDreamer
23 Jun 2003, 3:45 AM
You would be too, if they paid you for it, like how they pay him. Horus8, is a figment of some poor lost childâs mind on the plane of say Peter Pan. A defense mechanism gone horribly out of control. He doesn't sleep, doesn't eat. Rests fully clothed sitting or standing. Is fearless, godless, and undeniably psychic. A soul so old you can't shake it from your mind for days, weeks, sometimes forever. That one mutated gene that Darwin slept on for a lifetime. I've seen him enter a room and within 30 seconds be able to break the entire environment down into, I don't know, programs, formulas, codes of operating the room that he's developed to survive and entertain himself, even down to what spots are better to sit and stand in. Who to trust, who's dangerous, who he could love, who would love him, who's in control, who's not, what might happen if scenarios. I've seen him spontaneously bite people, blatantly imitate them to themselves, seduce, connect, humiliate, expose, enchant, hypnotize. Horus8 is strikingly scary at times, and other times the ultimate companion in everything. Once, I asked him how he did it (poet, father, teacher, writer, comedian, prostitute, drug addict, alcoholic, actor, singer, painter, sculptor, anthropologist, psychologist, historian, collector, director, producer, giver, taker, dreamer, elitist, Mason at the 33 degree) He stared at the wall as if he missed the question, then about two minutes later, out of no where, he says that he'd forgotten, there was a beat and then we just cracked the fuck up, but I've heard different rumors. Here's a short quick list I've compiled from memory.
You will find the rest of this comment posted as a recent under the title "Gordian knot" enjoy.
Freddy's Back!
coulophobic? excuse my ignorance, but what exactly is that supposed to mean? Webster didnt have any definitions.
cliche?
Why, are you coulophobic too.
Absolutely poetry at it's best
horus8
replying on Playing Russian roulette with a tuna cassarole By JFK by horus8
22 Jun 2003, 11:55 PM
Peerhaps it would aid you knowing that this is actually John K's latest lyric on poem ranker, stolen, violated and mutated into a vintage parody. I just do it a a way to pass the time in this new box of mine, and because it's just fucking hilarious if you read them side by side. Try it and see. His is called playing solitaire. He detests me more than a fish does a miracle turning Jesus, because he's too young to be thankful yet, but in about two years he'll be walking around bragging about it to all ends. He still doesn't realize what he's bumped into (I), once he does, it'll be the highlight of his current awareness.
We'll pray for him and his broken record. Please bow your heads with me.
Dispense more gum into the angels mouth, so no one else suffers his whining screams. I'll buy you a teddy so you won't be lonely when that poor angel chokes.. we can end the war man, theres hope!
Or we can simply let up and let the angel choke on the feces coming out his mouth and let him and the conquered lands rot into nothingness.. either way, we win, he loses.. ;)
Mmm yes, interesting it is.. now I learned that your a real clever one. Thanks for reminding me to question everything, seems your study is going well. ;)
Interesting :) -10-
I LOVE IT... *drool*
SupremeDreamer
on Playing Russian roulette with a tuna cassarole By JFK by horus8
22 Jun 2003, 9:45 PM
Extremely amusing, I started to cry when I found it hard to stop laughing. Slightly confusing though, or maybe thats just me. blesed with an 8, go in peace.
Reminds me of battles ive fought.. yes.. the scars still hurt. I give it a 7, good imagery and expression, but it could use a little more imagination I think.
I found much enjoyment with this poem, great work. ;)
Keep lines 1-10. Go directly to line 20, leaving out 'so' at the beginning of the line. Go directly to 'it's killing him'
That's a fairly good poem. Can't you see all the other lines sound like a telephone conversation between to imbeciles? No one, and I mean no one, is ever going to be interested in reading those kind of un-important conventionalisms. IT'S BORING, a huge waste of time and will turn off your audience. It's like meeting this really interesting looking guy and then you walk over to him and he opens his mouth and turns out to be a milk-toast whiner self-involved bore.
Tedium. That's what I'm talking about, TEE DEE EM. Strip the poem of it, This is the only thing I've seen of any worth from anyone besides the usual suspects. Come back witht he revision and then you can work on turning this into one basic good poem.
Nice wig
My bad, I didn't see the (zit), and for some reason I had disastrous spelled (Life with Tanya) forgive me.
thepinkbunnyofdoom
replying on Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom
22 Jun 2003, 12:47 PM
Disregard that Last statement I thought I saw a few but nope. No typos. I still have no clue what your talking about as far as Grammer.
thepinkbunnyofdoom
replying on Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom
22 Jun 2003, 12:40 PM
Shit I see several. Damn Damn Damn. I work it in word so I'm actually quite suprised. I'll fix those right away.