richa
on all is yet to come (version 2) by brazen
9 May 2003, 10:43 AM
I think three is a bit harsh, this has some good parts, I like the little entries of folklore
Very good dark angel. I wonder about this line though..."and findeth he an girl to rape, as should an gentelman!" Why would a gentleman rape someone? Is there some meaning behind this line? Very good though, I like the way you used words in this, kind of old english.
decent lyrics horus, but a part in there reminds me, in fact, it is taken right from a doors song...cops in cars, the topless bars...never saw a woman, so alone...ring a bell?! Try to be more original. The rest was pretty cool, reminded me of System of a Down.
First of all "horus8", I don't consider myself a "tough guy." Second of all I would never listen to siouxe and the banshees! I just write what comes out, and I gladly accept constructive criticism, but not flat out mean comments from some one who doesn't understand where I was coming from. Yes, a real man does shed tears, and that capital R had nothing to do with it.
You've got the answer wrong. What you meant to say was "the least fixed point of the function f : Real -> Real where f(x) = |x| and Real is the set of real numbers". What have you got to say for yourself, now?
very good, nice rythem
So many problems in this world today
I get more cuts and bruises everyday
Iâm crazy, sick and twisted, you just canât
Mess with this, Hell man, when you get right
Down to it Iâm ballistic, found, bound
Within my rights, I put on my gloves and letâs
Get on with this fight, donât back away, and cuss
Todayâs that day I unleash my rage, my anger
So vivid the earth trembles, it shakes and it quakes
But first, I really ought to finish ironing these napkins.
roughly 28
I was going for silly but hey close enough.
This is very funny. I hope it was supposed to be right? Because it's very funny.
horus808-May-03, 06:54 PM
http://www.mp3.com/horus8
a place to go to dirty more nappies.
Also where you'll find an electric version of
the crutchling in your honor in a month
or two. I fully plan on ripping off
your entire collection of lyrics and devoting
an entire album to you entitled
"The unbreakable wind"
It's the least I can do really.
To show you how much I love you.
You fucking toucan.
here's something you might find interesting
not that you are mature enough to grasp anything above your waste, but perhaps you might gather a chuckle.
Check out this article -- Filmmaker May Sue Evans, Carter To Stay In
the
Picture. Here's the url: http://www.nyobserver.com/pages/frontpag
Yeah, it's a song so, that's just one of those places where your voice's tempo has to stutter jam like bob dillon. Where you sing on the up and down beat. I have a version recorded, perhaps you'll here it soon, and dig on what i'm jiving at.
Nice job. I like what you did with my song. You, honestly, made it a little better. I gave a 6 instead of something higher b/c it is just a different version of my idea and a few different lines than from the original
Seems to me that there are a few awkward places if I read it out loud. Other than the "We've got a hundred reasons to live;" it seems to extend just about a breath too far compared to the rest of the lyric. Very nice tho -9-
I'm always on, fuck-knuckles.
Fart do I now face your on? Yes, you're on fart face.
They are both not limericks actually. The top one is closer though obviously. Thanks for the eight mate. Tell me, how's blade these days?
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Knights of progress 'alter boy shamed' by Bachus
8 May 2003, 2:38 PM
Perhaps he was too busy watching you obsessively reply to every negative comment someone makes on one of your poemes to notice you'd stopped caring what people think.
Seriously, do you think that bothers me?
Perhaps, I should just call it quits
because you don't read it half way through.
Boy, oh boy, oh boy. Where were you when I
cared about caring about what people thought?
Exactly.