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on Ode to a Sock by JakeBike
28 Apr 2003, 5:48 PM
I love the word odiferous. so i gave it a ten, not ten for the poem just ten for the word, no more no less and the vote shall be ten for odiferous and nothing else but ten, Have i made myself clear?.... ten
That's one way, but i'd end it a bit more 'out to lunch'and deatachable.
"in the dog house" or
With plastic covered furniture"
or
"high on flinstone vitamins". or not.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
on he was the one i had written about before i met him by rockinindividual
28 Apr 2003, 5:14 PM
Rub my quarter too? and raise him a pack of melting double mint in pocet number 'the rear'.
No idiot, her sheets were beginning to moist not chaffe.
Ralph Lauren make a better sock at Neiman Marcus.
Who gave this a 1 I wonder? Ah, well each to thier own.
The only thing wrong is 'So my stallion and me turned away'. It seems wrong for some reason. Perhaps 'my stallion and I'?
You're kindda amusing....ever ventured into the media?.......Anyways moving on I suppose it's rather unreasonable for me to assume that you see this side of the picture since ur SUV is prob more important than whats happening with people somewhere else in the world. Not here to determine right or wrong, just to express a viewpoint.So just keep believing whatever u want to and may GOD keep everyone safe no matter where they maybe......Amen
Oh sweet Columbus.
Dear, oh dear. Is someone feeling bitter? What is it then, hmmm?
More penis envey or just blinded by my talent?
Let me just nit-pick: Typo line 3, word 2, you illiterate goon. Also the end doesn't ryme. That is my old style, fool, not like my current style. And you can't come in my arse as even I have some standerds.
I was perusing this on fine milled paper as do like to print the longer poems out and have a darn good gander at them. I was interested in the capitulaton of the piece and I think Mr Caducus made an interesting comment about perspective. It reads as a very adult piece, from the last 2 lines of S1 I felt empathy and solace in the fact we all share the hurt of a lost bond wish to to say thank you for writing this it left me feeling happy on my own with a half baked cuban and a glass of sour mash over ice: 9: Take care my kindred friend.
how about velevted blood?
instead of beautiful?
Eminence achieved in your comment
Thank you for your informative comment, charmed I'm sure.
also proves that inspiration is everywhere.
Sure! Why not. and tributing Dark Angel as well. how fun. coffee fiend? you should be.
Black and white inspiration - photos - always so much more enamouring than color. This is a long poem from you I like its relaxed narrative telling a story from a vantage point of perspective coming alive from the 'phone call' which is where this poem to me became quite moving. Your prize is ...8
Thanks babe, i won't. :)
late toilet paper?
did you left-hand it?