Mr Pig (again)
on Unemployed by OneFingerAnswer
1 Apr 2003, 10:27 AM
Too much 'He'
I think the last line is wonderful. They are not easy these darned Haiku's. I see there is still no love lost between you and poetanknowit.
Found this hard PAKI. I have done the 5-7-5 thing and I wouldn't exactly say I was looking to say something profound I was just experimenting. The last line referes to the Old Testament which I find interesting because thats when God and Lucifer were both in heaven before our old pal Satan got kicked out for being rather handsome (amongst other things). Lines one and two were just set pieces for the ending, and irony and a possibility.
Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?
La de da de da de de, da de da de de da do
More of a statement than a haiku. I suggest a good read of the form and its purpose. No put the Nora Roberts book down! Now!
As I recall Elvis did sing 'Fever' with the Eden Perry band but thats another nut to polish. My dear spring truly is in the air, its in my step too after reading this. If you require my aid to spring you please call me on 0898-659-137698 : ask for Laurence.
No, Christof, I think he has you on this one. It most likely took him all day to compose it.
Interestingly enough you almost have the formula right.
Let us pray that you get what you want. Do you write of anything remotely interesting?
This seems more like some young attempt to desperately try to say something deep and profound to make the reader shutter in awe. But as a haiku it really says nothing much. Look to the origins; find the eastern spirit of the form. This just mocks it. But, hey, who needs Shakespeare, eh?
Oh my giddy Aunt Blythe, your certifiable.
Oh dear.
This one hits me where it's tender. I like it :)
I suppose I wanted the point to be directly ambiguous: Based on the fact of whether we create our own fears, which lead to a fragile paranoia or if we are helped along the way by the likes of the media, government and our homogeneous surroundings (or at least the folks who reside in those areas). Hmmm. Of course, I will come back to it.
Yes, I'm Okay. No, I hadn't been drinking alchohol. What triggered the psychotic episodes, apparently, was some Kava Kava tea I had been drinking. It's suppose to have some calming properties, and I was drinking it at night to counter my insomnia. I made the connection and stopped the Kava Kava, so far so good. So no Kava Kava for me.
I'm a nurse and have 15yrs. experience with Dr.'s. Most of them are sheep guided by the pharmaceutical companies and the almighty buck-a-runie. I don't go to doctors.
I've been through hell before, in the end I'll be better for it. I believe I'm already through the worst, will see. You already did the most helpful and loving thing you could, you forgave me. Thank you.
Yes, it was. Thanks for the vote.
we may not be Christ, but its safe to say that every-so-often i am God.
Thats gross man, now gentlemen PLEASE, your making me wanna puke.
I wear mine with glue its fish smelling glue and when it dries it turns to cheese.
I wear my lycra with glue, by the way, stops it slipping.