Nanshe
on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig
25 Feb 2003, 3:07 PM
Ah, Pig. I would like the chance to tweak this for you, but it needs a night in my unconscious. I shall sleep with it under my pillow, and, if you'll permit me, offer some words on the morrow.
Because you are a font, and oracle, a connection to their lost, balanced divinity; you are a seductress and a nurturer and they would have to lay down their arms to lie in your arms. Their desire for you weakens and maddens them. The young ones see it and tease; the older ones are deliberately ogres to frighten and dominate through this fearful casting.
Thanks for the link. I am not an expert but have pretty much gron up on the myths and yes they influence me a great deal. I think that's why I was confused. I knew the figures in your poem and what they represent, but I think the form is too narrow for the point you're trying to make. I'ts an inside job, and even as an insider I pretty much would have to read your mind to understand. For example I didn't know that about seahorses and that threw the whole concept out the window, even though I understood all the rest. So myth is one thing we hold in common.
Mr. Pig, why are all the boys afraid of me?
thanks for the clarification. that said, very cool.
Sorry, let me enlighten. Aeolus is the God of wind summoned by other Gods to punish the mortals. So when he sighs a tempest is cast. Now ot the irony well thats our pathetic clown Icarus, I ended the Haiku with a dual metaphor for Icarus and Troy both of whicgh were doomed, the wooden seahorses drowning represent the turbulence cast by Aeolus, Icarus sank to the depths of the Sea (poseidon) and seahorses have no control or direction (like Icarus), Icarus is amused that the skylarks cannot fly in the tempest. I read a bit on greek mythology and its fascinating.
Like the Haikus which refer to nature the greeks appointed 100s of Gods to interpret nature, wrath, suffering, beauty, happiness.
I guess I wanted to challenge myself and though i have woven a possible irony out of this I fear I have shot myself on the foot by a diamante rifle.
I know of a wonderful interesting website on Greek Gods and mtyhology which will truly inspire your work, great for metaphors and conections with nature.
www.theoi.com/abc.htm
Do have a gander and maybe comment later.
Not too big on the first line, but the rest is awesome.
Truly thou art the sparkling, pulsing, throbbing example of the shining ass-maggots of bad sex poemes.
I'm comfoozled Mr. Pig.
Sooo...howzabout "yall" quit bitching and moaning about how we're all too mean and either thicken yo'skin, give us a single reason to be nice to you (this is the one where you write non-ass-wipings) or kindly go fuck yourself and your ungrammatical, churlish attempts to judge a bunch of internet schmucks. hugs 'n' kisses!
I know the feeling. wonderful poem, though.
nyet. WE'LL be free. that's the point we make. Less people= more happy.
Shut uppa you mouth, asshat.
bah. my necrophilia poems were much better. so were all the ones I wrote about unusual anal stimulation. bah again.
sounds delightful. have some wine.
steaming cups of nether nog this poeme does truly suck. here's a delightfully phallic 1 for you.
these things happen. My new neighbours are fans of new country music and have lots of screaming fights. Looks like a job for the ol' +5 shocking frost burst dire flail. that or the sigil of death spell. either way.
DAMN GOOD man i think ur poem s excellent i am the one u wrote about and said dont kill yourself and u thought i was a hormonal young boy and i am not a boy and i am a girl i am 12 years of age and i would just like to point that out my poems are not even as half as good as yourss are because i have only been writein for like 4 years off and on and as i can imagine u have alot more years on me with both age and writing poems and just everythig about it i would appreciate it if u could maybe coach me into how making peoiple visualize my poems..u are probably thinking why would i want to help her...well because this could maybe be my career i love writing and i would like some herlp from a professional..thank you
Now thats more like it, at last all I've seen is sex sex sex and frankly I am sick of it. Thank you for this its so pleasing to see one is hungry for knowledge other than pantomime pornography.
Now my dear boy, there is something else please help me. I promised Quarton who has just posted a poem about space, that you may be able to help him with stanza 2, he may think me a darn fool but I loved stanza one but he needs to do something to stanza 2 its simply a beef wellington short of the sage, Please see what you can do I have offered some sound advice to the gentleman but theres a bloody fox trying to get at my chickens, so I must go and sound the pipe horn.
Thanks awfully my boy.
oh how rude heres a double ..10
Righty Ho then bombs away !
I was frustrated at the finale of this piece as there is so much fun one could have with this. Their are a multitude of metaphors you could utilize representing 'her' in the last line, #
1) who is she lets give her a name, if oyu look hard enough you will find in latin or the omega plenty of demi-gods representing the universe. Something as infinite as this subject requires infinite literature. Also what is this distant planet, do tell us more. wher eis it? describe its solar rings, write as if you are watching the majesty of the deep dark universe and take us there my boy.
Now on the positvive sides what a wonderful opening 4 lines, alas from there you may have got a bit lazy.
Now I do hope you modify this poem because I think it would make a bloody nice change from sex, that seems to dominate and pollute the beauty we are here for.
Oh there i go again oh dear, I get lost sometimes in the passion of the piece.
Now I must go and water my geraniums so i bid you good day sire. --6 and please do think of what I have said.
I will ask around on my travels for people to read this, infact I'll ask Mr Horus.
Oh my dear boy I seem to be lost, I clicked on the wrong poem, but will read this as a courtesy, Back in a jiffy.