MuDvAyNe
on -=Dark_Angel=- RAP by poemwanker
4 Feb 2003, 9:27 AM
i like it
to the earth they did rescind?
ohho wooohoho
Like dust in the wind dude
excellent so-crates!!!
how many mariannes or monikers is that now?
You are greedy minus the a.
Still fighting?
didnt kind of have the flow, bit too predictable. -5-
Would i lie to you baby would i lie to you?
oh yeah
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liked the opening it really grabbed my attention and this ones a sticker. 8
This is great. God i wish i could write like you, but as many will confirm i always end up producing a load of old rubbish.
Just one small suggestion, perhaps you could change the last three words to "I wub wou"
stop it with the racyism, and the ruderies. No neeed. Perhaps you could have said
Utter suger. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb flunk.
or
Utter slop. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb twot.
or
Utter tripe. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb waiter.
==Doylum
replying on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
4 Feb 2003, 7:35 AM
Ooooh get her!!!
I though you made it up. But you didn't. It exists. Somebody actually went and did it. They spent their time making a site to about poo. You go there and...... rate poo.
Jolly good.
love IS.
i have known despair; we smile every time we meet. and i always lose.
i no longer lay the blame for my own limitations on love.
we are love. we often forget this.
so, in that respect, we are contained by love because we are no more and no less than it.
Thats why -=Dark_Angel=- so just think on
Besides other topics aren't super and lovely enough to be made into poems, only love is truely poetic!!!!!
she chopped it off?
Just cause you had a quick handshandy?
How awful.
Can i have it for my collection of peni through the ages?
yeah silly girl, cause zeros done lots of stuff, and if you can't work out who it is then your really silly, so there. I think you should spend all your time trying to work out who writes stuff under different user names, afterall its such a clever concept!!!!!!!!!!JIOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLO LOLOLJIGTIPTopOfTheMorinToYou
Genius. Have a 9.
Utter shite. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb Yank.
I was trying really hard to make it Iambic. Iwas'nt sure about the recind either, I'll try too make that bettter. whas wrong with handfull? (many) again Iambic attempt (Ihate filler words but sometimes...) (lingered) 2 syllables? I'm not home and I don't have all the ttols I need damnit. sorry water sans apostrophe is correct in this case. it belongs to the water.
So-Iambic again. sleep-metaphor for quiet. Thanks so much for your time. when I get some myself I'll see what i can do about recind. Fuck, making things smoothe to the ear is hard. It's such a rough world we dlive in eh?