Caducus
on Cat by Topaz Servias
8 Jan 2003, 4:55 AM
For a 10 minute piece of poetry its very good, the last stanzas crap but apart from that it works really well, cats are like snakes with fur mine is truly evil. -7-
I was enjoying this until you repeated stanza 3. Its got a good narrative which is interrupted by the 'his might' lines they somehow affect the flow. Anyway It doesnt deserve less than a 6 I'm giving a 7 however.
Desperation drips from the teeth of this gnarling beast, liked the overtones of darkness in this -8-
heres a 9 for spending your whole day being fucked off whilst doing this
this is okay I have a feeling your not particularly bothered are you? heres a 5
It's tory boy! Yea, in case you don't know, he is a tory, he has his own online spreadsheet game and is a lonely geek. Give it up to scotty dog, the all round loser! I'm sure he has valuable suggestions. He should know all about crap. His party sure is.
I agree, this is truely origional crap.
you shouldent be so hard on him this is a fine excample of some originality.
Full of hostility and interesting to see your reflection on a tainted chapter in your past, I read this as no one has read it for a while and liked it -8-
Oh no, more shite. God help us. 0
It's been here 5 mins. Thats 5 too long. Bin it.
It's still here. It's still crap. try again.
What the hell are you talking about, sounds like you have no life to me!!!
It's crap. 0
Adam, you definately are not a man. I'll give you 50/50 on being carbon-based. 0
This sucks almost as much as your mum. 0