wOrnella Mutiw
on michael jackson's other glove by bondjedi
3 Jan 2003, 9:17 AM
Hahaaaaaaaaaa....he is slowyly evolving into a Malaysian woman.
Like the subject, quite like the poem but how impressed I would be to read it completely from the animals perspective, now that would earn maximum points, I might have a go at it - see I'm inspired !
(Went to see the chimps once as a kid and they chuked their shit at everyone gawping at them, THATS POETIC JUSTICE ) good day sir heres a 6
fanfuckingtastic, and appropriately tuned for YK03 resolutions.
see also: 'ending' http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
Lovely
This is supposed to be a poem to show that we don't really know a thing...what better way than confusion? If you don't understand a poem, it doesn't mean it's bad.
Are you seriously saying that there is nothing in here worthy of praise? If so, I would ask you to stop voting from the head and start voting from the heart-just because something doesn't conform to all the rules is no reason to instantly dismiss it. Did this poem not conjure up images in your head? I tried to write it that way so it would. If I failed, then either this needs to be reworked (it is only a draft, after all), or you have no imagination at all.
How many people here know anything about epistemology? It's fascinating, but confusing. It's exactly the same with this poem.
Yup.
I read Tim Allens' "I'm not really here". Does that count?
well he made you say scarlet bubbles and shake your fist at the sky and so no lord, not the scarlet bubbles, and that my friend is a funny site, and deserves merit. and a heavy metal pimple poem would not include christmas, ever. because megadeath broke up last year, so... there. also i have a soft spot for socrates because he had an imp.
Because he could? Sheer contrariness? The most famous example of a villanelle is Dylan Thomas's _Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night_: http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?prm
that bastard. he new i'd do this..his laughter..haunting me!!!!!!!!!!!! no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! what time is it? noooooooooo! i have to go to some mervyns ausitin in two hours, and then go see bill my photographic conquistador..snap the picture, take it off hey!, snap the picture it's cold as hell hey! take the shot before i eat your custom light hey! my brain hurts, and i love it hey! hey! hey! picayunes aye? sounds delightful..one of repeating villanelle in raymond burrs work, or the sound of his wheelchair approaching the crime scene...why did he call his a villanelle?
This is way too over the top. You turn me off from reading the rest pretty much immediately. "Escaping from this..." sounds like a sentence that escaped from a -=Dark_Angel=-'s lastest entry. This poem lacks a seriousness. 'phosphorescent sizzling metaphor'!? That's just ugly.
Show me the dance, don't just tell me about it. Lose the soaring spirits and dreamy dream dreaming. See how Roethke does it? http://gawow.com/roethke/poems/43.html
i like crunch berries much much better than fruity pebbles. but i'll take what's behind door #1 any morning, hung over or not.
Nope, not yet.
h--i liked this very much, but it ain't a villanelle. for a tongue-in-cheek, fill-in-the-blanks look at the pattern of a villanelle, see nentwined's "killer boredom butterfly (esoteric). you gotta repeat and exchange the lines, mon frere. and it's all ababababababab rhyming. mayb baba should wright it? she's got the chops and the name for it.
just go on and change this to free verse, and leave it be. there's a few picayunes, but i'll get back to you on those.
ta.
This comment/sentence alone was worth the booger chewing boredom of skimming your poem, but i did notice a few errors,
"OWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!" should be kerplochie,"actuly" should be a retrospective complete with sound effects, and three inch floopy should be more reserved, say two? and we did kiddie porn last month, which makes you kitsch, or some other euro trash word that constitutes dumpster diving.
Stick Jacko's dick up your arse.
Also, i'm aloud to be nice for special occasions.+