Amelia
on I wish.......... by little_angel_maria
11 Dec 2002, 12:36 PM
That's very depressing. I don't think I was ever that depressed at that age! No wait, I was worse! ARGH!
Oh pardon me settle, I ignorantly did not read the last part of your comment. You used some, forgive me.
Baba, baby I think she meant 'most'. Not every babe is automatically a slut or "reeks (you used REEKS!) of death and weakness"
Death and Weakness?!!!!! You bufoon!! Are you gay?
Jeez razor, you are razor-like in your unforgiving "buzz off! finally!" signal you're sending. Do you really hate teens that much? They do make devoted friends.
Pinwheel eye made me think of those those typical sci-fi- movie "shots-from-underneath" of the UFO, with the spinning bottom, like an eye. Of course, then it'd be "I look up at pinwheel eye" I suppose . . . but it worked for me as is.
"for you lovely shape" could use a little work even by my standards, but my dear, I definitely agree, it gets better
1. Eminem has probably never met you, doesn't know you and wouldn't care.
2. When you are on poem ranker for a little while you'll understand that a large percentage of the population on this site are out of their teens and as such do not -because of even bigger problems- remember what it was to be a teenager with only pimples and boys as your biggest problem.
3. You will see in time that you will get over it and it may seem like a big deal now, in fact, it is a big deal but give yourself at least 2 more years and you'll consider your actions very stupid. But when that happens, don't forget how you dealt with your problem and expand on how much better you can solve your problem.
4. You're in the teen years, everything rubs you the wrong way, it's a known fact. Take this from someone who just turned 18 and is considered a little too wise for her own good.
Hey I liked your resolutions on the year 2003 by the way. stick to them.
Lol Razor, do pimple poems always have be considered terrible?
Hey maria, it's naive but sweet.
did you write this or is this plagiarism?
Blade, you really need to get the movie blade out of your head. I bet you know every part of that movie. You and Maria should try not to enjoy the I'm-the-victim, everyone-is-being-mean-to-me rung too much. This is a poetry website. Take a break, like I do. If you wish you could just grab them and shake them, you can't. Besides, you sound extremely dumb and childish (pay attention I didn't say child-like let's not insult children) when you answer criticism with anger and curses. Simply take the criticism, better the poem or get rid of it and start again. Come back when your poems look less like shit(e).
Jeez Maria and Blade are getting the last rung since I've been here. Hi blade I'm the bipolar one. I was just about to leave and pretend I did not see the stuff I saw, considering that I have used english wrongly on more than one occassion, I thought I might have some compassion for you. Reading your poem twice changed all that, it is exactly what everyone else calls it: SHIT(E)!!!!
Alright dear this isn't half bad you just have to get rid of the things that make it sound childish.
To kiss him is to surrender.
To laugh with him, a lasting memory
Blurred not by time.
Vanishing like steam
His hands on me
Speak languages
Only my soul knows.
here I could spend eternity.
good luck with the writing.
is gonareha some kind of rotten balsamic sauce over rotten kidney beans dish? How about I give you what you deserve for your effort.
welcome back amalea. i see return in full style.
by the way, -=Dark_Angel=- does not vote. sorry to disappoint you.
Other than you repugnant love for shit ( I think you must talk to
your shit while you poop or something either that or you've eaten shit. Tell me, how did it taste, Like pig meat?) Other than that, this is funny. No really the last line is not sarcastic.
Do you eat shit or something? and did you vote 10 times for yourself that must have taken a lot of work and courage.