god'swife
on The Dreamer by Nicholas Jones
5 Dec 2002, 1:27 PM
Redundant. Lacks emotional language, or better said, the emotion is lost, I can't explain. I want to believe the fear, feel it.
A few too many tics, and typos. Go through with the spell check.
What on earth are you talking about? Annoying, teenage, hormonal? When did I use these words to discribe you? I made a comment, constructive at that. It would behoove you to take my advice, but no matter. By the way cast all the vengeful 0's on my poems as you like, the votes mean nothing to me. They only reflect what is difficult to express with words. If your poems come up in random and I feel like commenting I will. At that point you have 3 choices;
Take some good advice
Censor my comment straight off
Reply with an assinine hurt little girl whine
It is all up to you. My comment was well intended, and in fact quite accurate.
thank you for proving that the crap poeme-pump is still in service.
I have been spending my time productively writing essays and reviews as well as a couple of experiment designs. that said, all work and no heckling makes razorgrin even more cranky.
at least it wasn't a guinea pig, i guess...
Sorry for annoying you with my mixed up, teenage, hormonally driven way of writing about things that piss me off. Avert your eyes to some other page.
actually...it's "like...oh my god!" don't you listen?
Blade Blade on the run
Cuz you voted yourself to # 1
Do you think you earned the prize?
oh, with my combo i want fries?
and my change promptly...by the way... nice name tag.
well...
Your poems seem to have a the black thread of hypocrisy running through them. You point out the weakness in others, which for me personally, is a big turn off. Righteous indignation is also hypocritical. Di you ever turn the magnifying glass on yourself, it burns but usually reveals more relevent and touching details.
I spelled attitude wrong. sorry
I'm a little tired lads.
PAKI I'm not trying to sway anyone to a certain style or
atitude about punk. the title is a rip off of a bad brains
song " just another dam song ". it's just a screw work
poem, song I wrote at work. I was bored. I do have
more deep poems more abstract. but this is not one of them.
I hope you liked it for what it is. gabba gabba hey.
i like 'em young. real young, if you know what i'm saying. 9 swastikas for the young women! (sorry, the snow is making me stir crazy)
is this about you losing a guy to an older woman? i like it, although i don't like old women, sexually, that is. 8 swastikas!
Heh, PK, you're top division. Great stuff. No quarrel with it. 9
Oh My......................................
the last line is inconsistant and base. it interrupts the flow and tone.
wow...you're talented!L