Limness
on TRIBUTE TO A FRIEND by Nicholas Monson
5 Dec 2002, 7:21 AM
entertaining. but i think you could do it better--it's choppy in places, and i have seen that you possess command enough to mend this.
great metaphors. ironically, i feel the affection and cautious lack of attractions. well-crafted, sir.
i think that 'quietus' has context clues enough to justify its use, and the assonance is the reason i chose it. it's a whispery word, which is where my grief walks now. and, it was an ending, a passing, because although he is still very alive for me, there is no 'us'; that entity is a dead hope.
i will have a look at yours. thanks.
It does get irritating. Bloody influencing Yank Colleges and soriety clubs.
Let's not confuse vulgarity with art.
craftless.
Not particulatly interesting to anyone other tjhan for you and who it was written for, however thats not to say its shit or anything its one of those split opinion ones, I liked it, though you could widen its appeal by being more original heres a respectable 6
You should carry this on more it ends to abruptly, this could be promising so kick this back in there, the 3 votes a bit out of order -6-
Ice cream is excellent moisturiser so my mates tell me
So would I;but I would use something more painful,like a cheese grater.
Perhaps this is a synopsis for a new 'Nightmare on elm street' film?
Or perhaps not.
A pretender to the crown of Freddy I see. Hmmm, I did not realise what I am up against. The record shall have to be set straight.
It was a professional i went to see
I found his number in the telephone box
he wont see me again says i bring bad luck
He lost his stethoscope, his forceps, his speculum.....
....and funnily enough he lost reginald his hampster that very same day
oh and zzinnia too
This moved me PK, it made me feel for you watching her grow up from a child and realizing one day she'll be independent. Also I wanted to get something straight, what i meant by 'old school' was poets more experienced than myself whos been on this site longer, It wasnt meant as offensive, I'm here to learn off you, GW, Intrasit, Horus, Dark Angel,Tintagiles, your all muses of mine -take the compliment
ah yes england that green and pleasant land, where old dears cycle through bucolic (always sounds like a disease of the lungs to me) splendor dispensing homemade preserves to the local community, where every door is on the latch and one is always welcome! And young timmy from number 43 is always willing to come round to toast crumpets twixt his warm and splendid cheeks for nothing more that 50d and a milky way.
you crack me up !