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on The Rebel by Nicholas Jones
4 Dec 2002, 10:48 PM
can i milk her while she watches you write?
simply to live and know, i hope i don't return...i hope there is no heaven...only sleep void of form or thought. some divine knowings here, accompanied by radom pot shots also...bit too long, but i say that in knowing that it can and will go forever.8
why do people say abyss so much!? FUCK
words for the circus. rather.
it was worth a shit while you were loved by another and oblivious because... but then in the last 4 or 5 sentences you bite your tail off by trying to criticize those with deep pockets...simply because anyone with half a brain understands the uselessness that accompanies the jealousy-guilt of that sentiment.6. i love the penny in the boys purse though.. nice twist..not lemonade mind you, but damn tasty still.
can i ask you a sincere question? WHAT IN THE FUCK ARE YOU BABBLING ABOUT, AND WHAT EXACTLY CONVINCED YOU SPECIFICALLY speaking, THAT ANYONE SERIOUS ABOUT WRITING WOULD GIVE A FUCK?!
to self absorb. wow did i say that? sure did. grand funks on...gotta go. 5.
horus8
on The wonderful happy relationship between two wonderful and caring people by Dark Angle
4 Dec 2002, 4:19 PM
finely crafted...like a deer antler pipe in the hand of a drueling lazy boy chaired drunk uncle.
I don't cram. I do, however, hold myself to a reasonably high standard in essay writing. Which is what I'm doing: nailing together a pile of literary criticism. E-mail here: beatrice@splah.net
hang on then how does that work? Right so you take someones age and then, no no lost it. Looks clever to me though
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on I Am A Poor Little Boy In The Land Of Love by sweetzephyr
4 Dec 2002, 3:46 PM
TRY AGAIN PLZ.
this is so THICK
and nice
COME ON! ALL ON A KISS?
A circus of words!
You still find the time to show up. Are the others (Tint and Limonade)cramming and you are truly a wizard.
I don't know what the fuck you are talking about. No matter. This is but a glimpse I am certain.
And what did he find in the other side? Everything he hoped for, or just some stupid girl wearing out her heels from kicking the bricks? She's pretty though, isn't she? Now they'll have each other to tear at.
in a while. what, don't you miss me?
What's the girls name? I'm telling you if you put here name there it would work. there are so many good titles for this poem, only you know what's real, I think that's important. If you do revise this, which you should, you have received some good comments, try a different title. don't worry about losing your votes. Most rankers come back to the good ones and re-cast.