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<{Baba^Yaga}> on Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 9:59 PM

you are an odd fish for sure. cheers! i was kinda inclined perceptively to the image of the bear in the weeds.

<{Baba^Yaga}> replying on Three pointed star by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 9:55 PM

have you driven one? they're dreamy smooth rides.

purplestain replying on untitled by purplestain 20 Nov 2002, 9:35 PM

i have certainly come a long way before i could come up with something as read-able as this

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 9:03 PM

I agree, fuckit. I'm too tired to care right now anyway. gotta move some fuckin fords.

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:50 PM

The contradiction is a fragrance and woman#1 expecting her beau to be faithful while she wasn't. Romance: Fragrance and woman#2 This hs nothing to do with target stores. Obviously that must go.

<~> replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:49 PM

no. i miss things. somebody else might get it 110%

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:46 PM

I dun fuuuuuuuucked UP!

ecargo replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:46 PM

I'm not getting the story--what was the contradiction? And the romance? Howsabout: The target window closes slowly, and she feels sexy in Victoria's secret. Tonight she slips into satin and tears. Looking at it sideways--umm, I dunno. My line breaks are very literal. It's my gift and my curse.

<~> on Going to River Phoenix in my mind by horus8 20 Nov 2002, 8:45 PM

three nice things i have to say about this rewrite: cleaner. faster. stronger. have a blow job. on me.

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:41 PM

Clarifying: Another under same idea?

<~> replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:38 PM

___________________________________________________________________________________this far. i get: washed-up ex-beauty stooping to Target, and used to think VS was top-o-the-line. sad.

<~> replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:34 PM

points for trying. show your wife. ask her. tehn write another. homework assignment #1.

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:34 PM

I was going for an unfaithful girlfriend that expected boy to be faithful. Then a second girl "stole"him. limited time to correct.Her name is victoria and the same femme guile she used, she lost to as well as fragrances for women. How far off?

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:29 PM

I do seem to write better when I'm emotionally impaired?

<~> on Papa Smurf by Bachus 20 Nov 2002, 8:28 PM

because he can't get his hand away. it's glued firmly in place. that's why.

INTRANSIT replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:26 PM

I have all the info i want in it. I dont like my line breaks though. Not cruelty. Definitely outside of me as I'm male,points for trying?

<~> replying on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:24 PM

duo was better by far. because there was a thirst driving it, and passion in it.

<~> on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:20 PM

this feels like clumsily-aimed cruelty. perhaps you will say it is brutal honesty, with a modicum of compassion. but i don't feel it. it is outside of you, and you are trying too hard to get in. false.

Bachus on Night-mare by INTRANSIT 20 Nov 2002, 8:04 PM

i once stole a mannequin.

<~> replying on Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss 20 Nov 2002, 7:18 PM

yes. he does. i bring my own baggage to the reading of this. which is why i have not commented further, or voted on it yet. i read it and i like it, but iwanted it to be more strict and still woo me. and it seems to me that you could accomplish that. so i'll sit for a spell, and come back when i am...even.